down the aisle of man

down the aisle of man

 

 

slanted directions

shaded misgivings

north, south arrangements

when given time,

we slope momentarily against judgement

and think in terms of compass agreement,

rather than intuition,

 

the heart gets lost amidst turmoil

caused by confused perceptions

i'm a hobbit by nature

a little mind among the tall and strong

 

just trying to find that ring of congruent enlightenment

that circle of sustenance

where inner peace has the opportunity

 

to slip itself into my being

like a band snugly placed on a finger

with hints of forever.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/6/16

Reviews

[redzone]

everyone talks of "inner peace" but to me the "north and south" "congruence" is more the touch of holding hands, that look on her face when she smiles, the wisp of hair that falls across her face when she is concentrating on a crossword puzzle, that surprised look when you have done something good... inner peace comes when you are no longer in need of it and it is more as the result of outward peace (maybe we could call it the east and west ..lol) anyway, this is not to say that we do not want happiness in our lives, we do, but it comes mainly not from within, but from everything around us... even if it only last for a short time or is illusory... and walking down that aisle more a reflection of property rights than enlightenment...

as usual Jacob, I go astray in your poems, wandering around, thinking out loud; perhaps chasing Bilbo around as he slayed those Orcs, or Frodo as he finally destroys that ring, saving everybody's arse. I guess the only ones who truly found that "peace" was the "King" and Sam as they both found the love of their lives...

it is difficult to have loved and it not last as long as we hoped it would..

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

imagine how hard it was for Frodo to actually let that ring go into Mt. Doom...i bet Bilbo would have had a tougher time...your responses are better than the poems themselves...i really enjoy where you go with my words...amazing to me...

j.

[Dalton]

To expand on Solar's review, I continue looking at the title (though differently). Phonetically, 'aisle' sounds like 'isle'. An isle is usually a small island, and this reminds me of the solitude in which this poem was perhaps born. Brilliance seems to originate in lonliness, which one may self-impose or perhaps oneself is exiled by lowly minds - the herd. Enlightenment, inner peace, and sustenance are topics of concern to the Sadhus of India, Hindus and Buddhists. Asceticism seems to make an appearance here, even if it is simply a speculative thought in the writer's mind.
This is a lovely piece.
Salute,
D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Dalton...i appreciate your words.

j.

[Jennesis]

Aren't we all just searching for meaning and a peaceful place to rest within ourselves? We want it all to make sense, and we all seek it in differing ways. I talk a lot about congruence in my work, making the inside match the outside in a genuine way. Love this one~

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jenn...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Inner peace....we chase it from the moment we learn what stress is. Bilbo Baggins would swear that Smaug had inner peace and refused to share it! :) The metaphors are splendid....and what we all expect from you, Jacob. I enjoyed the Hobbit reference...obviously. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi....even though i am not generally into fantasy, at all...the Hobbit and The Lord of the Rings together, the best thing I ever read...and read many times...interesting concept about smaug refusing to share his inner peace.

[Fran Marie]

I like the whole ring effect circling this poem connecting each part to the other..as always great metaphors used.That inner circle of peace can indeed be quite difficult to find in life...
Well done ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran Marie,

j.

[V]

I think you created a nice imagery of a man's way of thinking. I also like the cinematic metaphors you used.
It reads kind of tranquil, maybe because you wrote about peace, but it's easy to follow and enjoyable.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, mimi...
j.

[paddy d daly]

I like your portrayal of male thinking
and also the references to Lord of the
rings, enjoyed the read Jacob, great
work as always, p.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, paddy,

j.

[Solar]

The aisle of man - like the Isle of Man - has a ring of romance about it ...the quest...

for inner peace, congruent enlightenment - that rings true in the hobbit's heart

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Solar...
j,.

[Corset]

that little band give us such a huge and false sense of security, that at times we forget to LAVISH and SAVE, our partners :P nothing lasts forever...certainly nothing material...just the spiritual love lasts on and on. Well done Jacob as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset...

j.

[B. Boileau]

That search for inner peace is a life time journey. As long as progress is made along the way Im good with it... That in it self is inner peace. Go figure !

Reliable words, always something to ponder. You must be one hell of a professor my friend!!

bill

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, bill,

j.