sheet music

sheet music

 

 

caustic blues,

acid tones

strings disintegrate 

in the moody liquid night

 

the sax intrudes 

horns disturb in sassy traffic

 

drums tap

heavy handed

she sheds a tear

leaves lipstick on her cigarette

a shade that was meant for his lips

 

 

outside a neon light 

flickers, a couple letters missing

 

burned out like she is

 

 

she looks around for a match

hums along with the band.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/1/15

Reviews

[...]

Jacob, I love this. So deep and rich in emotion just like the blues. I love the blues, it IS "liquid night", thick and sultry. This is an awesome scene, full of vivid imagery and deep smoky tones, I'm keeping it :)

[...]

P.s. the title is perfect :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lynn...

j.

[...]

my pleasure. Awesome piece, Jacob :)

[Einstein Noodle]

such an emotive packed moment ... a dissonance against ...lets say New Orleans ... like back alleys too far around the corner ... but there she is ... like cats landing on feet ... still hell bent ..but at least alive and walking .. fine experience in reading .. into the 'ol library it goes ..joy and peace
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

I`ve stopped posting poems for the moment as I am waiting for a reaction for a small collection I`ve submitted to some sources, but I`m still here and will never miss a poem from Jacob.This a fine poem,
cool, full of jazz, reminds me of the fantastic accounts of jazz in On the Road, a quality write !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your visits, Leslie...thank you, and best of luck with your collection...if the publishers are smart, they will accept it.

j.

[B]

I see her life
The natural process of life and death
of everything
All the items you mentioned above
have a life span
nothing is endless

its life

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true...thank you for your insights,

j.