shallow waters

shallow waters

 

 

spinning adversaries

pivoting slanderous words

in my direction,

a poet's catch

which nets rejection

the hideous nature of truth

 

many will cower from it

throw stones at the writer

feeling it is better to skip their unhappiness

across a poetic pond,

 

than look in the mirror

and stop dancing

on their pedestal...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/28/15

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

nice satirical in your face nasty troll! they come and go don't they ..the obscenity of those reviews demands no response ..lest one makes the nasty happy ..i block and report and delete .. the great shame and loss for us all is when said troll manages to harass to the point we loose a dear friend and writer .. such a pity :( i am glad you posted this jacob .. it is well timed and has the need to be said...
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.


j.

[Einstein Noodle]

dear jacob ...you are welcome for sure ...but i need you to tell me if i have captured the essence of your poem .. or even the fringes ?? ... i think you are remarkable in poetry and satire and symbolism .. but if i miss your mark .. and you dont tell me .. i can not grow :{ ... know what i mean? so ... love and peace always jacob! no doubt about it
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the way you grow with poetry is to find what you find in the work, how do you relate?
i never intend or hope that a reader will get exactly what was in my mind when i wrote a piece. As i teach my students in poetry class...instead of trying to figure out what the poet was thinking when he or she wrote the poem, figure out what you the reader are thinking when you read it.
i think poetry belongs much more to the reader than the writer of the piece.

and what you interpreted is quite valid..especially with what has been going on at the site lately.

your interpretations are always so well thought out and insightful.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much ..i do try and understand the poet ...and i get that some poems are simply meant to inspire ones own mind what ever way it may go .. your teaching frees me up .. it is sound advice .. love and peace sir!
E.

[NeiL ArandA]

This is so true Jacob. What a very perceptive observation you penned here. Our piece and to those who write to express their hearts and thoughts. Their piece for the most part are integral part or extension of a poets or writers personality with the exception of those who write fiction. I think in my personal opinion WC is still the best poetry site there is. It has so many options it offers options that compliments a writer's piece and presenting it in a variety of way to its readers and audience. It also has a wide range and variety of talented as well as eccentric poets. I have seen many aspiring and promising poets and writers closed their accounts and never pick up their pen or quill again. The rest pack up and moved to another more friendly and caring poetry site. This site is not for the faint hearted if we want to improve our writings. We will still encounter and bump into the likes of Simon Cowell in our arduous literary journeys of writing a masterpiece that rivals Daffodils by Wilson Woodrow and Sonnet 18 by William Shakespeare .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really agree with you...there are glitches...and there are trolls at times..but in general...nice people and some really inspirational writings to get our gears turning...
thank you for sharing these thoughts.
j.

[David Scott]

I think often well intended "help" is misconstrued to vile intent. Yet some people thrive on negativity. Communication is not easy in person and much more difficult in an online forum.
Is anyone qualified to offer critique? Do we not give allowance for it by posting on a public site? Thicker skin and more tender hearts would help.
Good topic for this site to ponder. Ever the inspiration Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is better than the poem...thanks for your words, David.

j.

[David Scott]

Never... I am glad to know you found value in the thoughts I shared, or rather mirrored, back to you.
You even excused a bad typo. Pander/ponder. Ha could work either way. We do pander from time to time as well. lol.

[Jimmy Yetts]

An insightful--and, of course, metaphorical--assessment of trolls, lashers-out and unreasonably negative critics.
You nailed it, prof!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind with your words, Jimmy,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

To often we are chastised for the words we write. Some do not want to read words mirroring their own emotions...they hide from them. We all are human. As such, we all can experience similar situations. None of us is better than the other. Are we adversaries? At times it feels that way. Powerful look at humanity here. Lydi**

[Lily Finch]

Very unique and amazing write...
I like the way you penned about people's mindsets !!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lily.
j.

[Lily Finch]

You welcome sir :)

[emme33]

Beautifully written! You use words in such a unique way, really great work :)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, emme...

j.

[gabrielle]

This made me think that we have often times killed a messenger because we do not particularly like his message. Brilliant as always :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gabrielle...

j.

[Ayvid N]

The truth and reality are always bitter and most of the world prefers rose-tinted glassess. So it follows naturally that the poet is stoned. But then so were the prophets.

An amazing poem on people's mindsets.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA...

j.

[dan]

The watery metaphor carrying the early elements of the write are then melded into a piece about emotional avoidance; the pedestal a representation of wasted water spiraling downward, as if into a drain. Another of my favorites of yours, jacob, very nicely done! take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, dan.

j.