Eros' Galoshes

 

Eros' Galoshes 

 

 

it's kind of raining out

and i kind of love you

when the sun sort of shines

you are sort of my umbrella

 

and yet we both get wet

and we both feel the love

as it pours down,

 

like a strobe light

glistening through rainbow rain

as the arrow impales our hearts

together

in vivacious color

 

kind of 

sort of

like high definition

reflects our intentions

 

off the puddles of commitment

that surround us.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/27/15

Reviews

[terry smith]

you know when the sun comes out real bright after a heavy rain and there is a rainbow...next time that happens i am going to jump in the first puddle i see and think of this poem!!you paint suck a beautiful picture in my mind...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i hope the puddle is deep enough, terry....
thank you for your words...

j.

[terry smith]

shallow waters would barely get my heart wet

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes. :)

[Julia Ledo]

Love the sweetness in this. The whole kind of, sorta, tentative love

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i kinda , sorta thank you...:)))

j.

[W.k.kortas]

I love the juxtaposition of "the arrow impales our hearts" and "like high definition", the old meeting the new. Wry look at the nature of true commitment....y'know, sort of.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such a smile your replies always give me...thank you, my friend...

j.

[Cassie]

I like that you write on any subject and write so well bringing out the message across so well. This is good as usual Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie...appreciate your read and your words....

j.

[David Scott]

Ha! This is hilarious!
We wonder why love is bland and never even consider it might be because we never even put the effort into it.
Love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, David.

j.

[LapseOfMind]

Oh man, great poem! The 'kinda sorta' was quite different and awesome. The last 6 lines I really enjoyed. Good job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[h d e rushin]

I kinda, sorta like the reasoning here Jacob. When it comes to being in love with another human
there will be unfashionable places it will take you. And then everything will be in a slowness
or high definitional wetness that will adequately define all your intentions.

Remarkable analogy happing within this interplay of atmosphere and color.

dana// love it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, dana...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Life if full of "kinda sorta" moments and situations. Commitment is a scary thing to many people....and yet....and yet....without it we are alone. The trick is to get your feet wet without catching cold! It is always a pleasure to read you, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an insightful interpretation...thank you for your words and constant support, Lydi..
read moresuch an insightful interpretation...thank you for your words and constant support, Lydi..

j.

[alifeacoustic]

I kinda sorta like the kinda sorta feel behind this one Jacob. Indifference or knowing fate leads the way, we take whatever rains down on us and each percieves a different scenario, through which we fool ourselves that every choice was made rationally, which is a word not often associatef with love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, alife.

j.

[Zugzwang]

Haha. The title is the best!
I enjoyed the ambivalence here, or was it hedging? To me, it communicates the tentativeness of new love. The metaphors were a lot of fun too...umbrellas, rain, puddles and getting wet. Kinda reminds me of being a kid. or ee cummings poem about the world being 'puddle wonderful'
Did any of that make sense? I enjoyed the poem, anyway.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your insights, Zeitnot...appreciate your visit.
j.