Nightly News

Nightly News

 

 

 

we have become comrades out of arms

colleagues of unrest,

friends of indifference,

i smoke my pipe, sip a beer

and watch CNN

while you sew quilts to keep others warm

and gaze at stars

that no longer appear

except in an antiquated sky

of your mind.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/21/15

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Reads like someone cares what's happening to the world while their partner just lives in a world of their own oblivious to the real world but quite happy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that idea...thank you for your words, andrew,
j.

[h d e rushin]

how appropriate. My mother sews on her quilt of patterned trains and railroads (although
the men came out looking like gingerbread characters) and only watches the news to see
the hunk of a weatherman. (her words, nor mine). But in this poem I see how the news has
changed us over the years. There was a time when at 6pm you plopped yourself down in front
of the old b&w and listened to the drone of Sir Walter, then the young whippersnacher who
took his place, Dan Rather. I remember that when the nightly news was on my father didn't even
move. Now with so much that sounds like news on multiple stations, 24-7, it's hard to
know what and who to believe. CNN and antiquated skies in the same poem. Who could believe it?

But in the Midwest, when they predict 10 inches of snow, you better get some gas for the snow
blower...

Your such a wonderful writer my friend.....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, 10 inches usually turns into 20---
thank you for your very kind words, Dana...
read moreyes, 10 inches usually turns into 20---
thank you for your very kind words, Dana...

j

[Alfred Kukitz]

You might try connecting during the commercials. Give it a try..........Bottom's up!


regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al....:)

j.

[Cory Barrett]

those last sips of beer are always the hardest to swallow. Warmed by the rocking visits to our lips, becoming familiar, and loosing effervescence. Best to choke them down and have another drag.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

probably...thank you for your words, Cory...

j.

[B]

disconnection while in complete presence
some suffer of too much connection
like me and my ehem baby
and some suffer from complete disconnection
i once has a relationship like this
i broke it off so fast

no heat
no love

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very true...there has to be some heat...or the thermostat just busts...and the pipes freeze.

thank you for your words, Nisreen.

j.

[redzone]

the world and our lives crumble around us, and we are indifferent cause it's all we think we can be/do... either dreamer or watcher.. and as such we drift apart, from each other and the world around us.... allowing CNN, Fox, or MSNBC determine what and how we think... I was going to say "bitter/sweet" but I think it's just bitter...

sorry if I took your poem way out there Jacob, but is a really good poem that does exactly what it should do, inspire thinking...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like where you took it, Curt...and always feel free....that is what poetry is about...and to get this kind of reaction to something i wrote...that encourages me...because you related in some way to it...and your insights are spot on.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Nicely written Jacob Sir....these few lines speak a volume....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Anurag.

j.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Absolutely no critique necessary here for a poem that shines with each successive line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Anika...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

CNN is a lot like "an antiquated sky" of the mind.
This couple seems more like victims of indifference.
Tragic and distressing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, true...thank you, Jimmy.

j.