Alcatraz of the Mind

Alcatraz of the Mind

 

 

 

incarcerated emotions

white haired jailbird

writes the same thing day after day

with his chalked will

on a wall of consumed memory

 

the sentence starts getting more punctuation

too many stops and restarts

the pauses, longer

the intention to finish the paragraph

loses momentum,

 

years fade into years

the warden paces,

 

just waiting.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/21/15

Reviews

[...]

Alcatraz is a tourist attraction now...catch the boat :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, maybe that is a good idea...thanks, lynn.
j.

[Firebird]

I think its time those emotions were set free. Very thought provoking. Thank you Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Firebird...

j.

[annalysiar]

Its like being imprisoned in your mind, and that is the worst thing that can happen to you. Medicated or non. Watching everything from the inside out. You captured that beautifully.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, annalysiar...

j.

[alifeacoustic]

I feel this one Jacob. The frustration of repitition and going through the motions, whilst remembering the long distant memories of freedom and the innocence of thinking it would always be so.
Superb, as ever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, alife...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I worked in a prison briefly. I handed out meds on death row. These men writings were nothing more than breath, everyday, twenty three hours. They slept but imagine opening your eyes to another day of repetitive poetry, inhale.......exhale.

Powerful!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you kind sir...appreciate your words,

j.

[emme33]

I love this poem! The concept of the warden pacing year by year as the protagonist remains incapacitated really builds the image in my mind. Great work :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, emme.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

thoughts imprisoned that cannot escape fade over the years as uncertainty grows comes to mind J. However I'm probably wrong lol. Nice work though.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

spot on...thank you, andrew...

j.