adjectives lost

adjectives lost

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


adjectives lost



you split my infinitive

i became a preposition with no object
of attention,
thus my sentence is forever
intransitive

and i no longer have use for the verb
"to-love."




erin-cilberto
11/12/15

© 2015 jacob erin-cilberto


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Great twist at the end to show the emotion of the broken relationship!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, Tomas...

j.
I wish I'd written that. I read it out loud to my son and he thought I had but only an English teacher could pull that one off.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Firebird

8 Years Ago

I told my mum about them. She doesn't like poetry and still hasn't read them it's probably just as w.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

that is sad...your poetry is engaging and would have a big audience....my family never really got me.. read more
Firebird

8 Years Ago

:/ oh..that must have hurt. My husband has written lots of clever poetry but he doesnt like much of .. read more
Oh! :-/ Clever and very sad!

Posted 8 Years Ago


That's his sentence and he's sticking to it. Hee Hee ,Period !

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thanks , Connie.

j.
I love how you've blended creative whimsy with a topic that is so painful and sorrowful.

wonderfully clever!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, rubie.

j.
Adjectives may have been lost--but not the humor, not the tragedy.
An excellent bit of work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Jimmy.

j.
This is fun, even though the topic is sad. It made me wonder how many people would look up what an infinitive is or the meaning of intransitive. (although I must say I tend to use them frequently being a bossy mother...lol) I'm sure not many will remember beyond the language nerds. Clever use of grammatical terms and homophones to highlight the split of a relationship and being left to wander without a direct purpose. It it in the last line that we see the real tragedy of your meaning.
While love makes good poetry, the loss of it adds a whole new dimension to a writers work. One of these days I want to find the time and energy to crank poems out like you do.
Jan

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Jaycee...

funny, i don't really have much time at all.. read more
JayceeC

8 Years Ago

I find I usually spit out one or two, or go on a writing spree and then nothing for a bit. I always.. read more
Lol ... you sounds being funny thou' evocative as well .. at the same time .. with words. Nicely swung! I like how you gathered the whole s***s of word & well shaped & turned into something poetic and so philosophical reading. Amazing. Enjoyed reading it for sure!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Adams.

j.
Knowing it was tongue-in-cheek didn't help... the sense of hurt still filled the mind.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, Chris...

j.
As the sadness lays upon memory I trust these words will find you well.

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, my friend.

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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