I wish I'd written that. I read it out loud to my son and he thought I had but only an English teacher could pull that one off.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
ah, thank you for that...i appreciate you reading it to him...and letting me know his reaction...read moreah, thank you for that...i appreciate you reading it to him...and letting me know his reaction...
i often read lines and poems on this site that i wish i had written...
8 Years Ago
Yes. My children don't like my verses. They haven't heard them all but they find them too depressing.. read moreYes. My children don't like my verses. They haven't heard them all but they find them too depressing for a mother to write. Maybe I should keep them to myself more often.
8 Years Ago
someday.....they will appreciate them....very much....
I told my mum about them. She doesn't like poetry and still hasn't read them it's probably just as w.. read moreI told my mum about them. She doesn't like poetry and still hasn't read them it's probably just as well. The ones I have read to my husband have made him laugh. He doesn't think much of them. Too many cliches and rhyming bits for him and far too much hyperbole. He has told me I should show them to a psychiatrist.
8 Years Ago
that is sad...your poetry is engaging and would have a big audience....my family never really got me.. read morethat is sad...your poetry is engaging and would have a big audience....my family never really got me, or what i write...i think it is a family thing.
my mom used to read my friend's poetry book and say "i like this, i can understand it!"
8 Years Ago
:/ oh..that must have hurt. My husband has written lots of clever poetry but he doesnt like much of .. read more:/ oh..that must have hurt. My husband has written lots of clever poetry but he doesnt like much of mine. It's too simple and cliched for him. I only started about two months ago and I just write what comes out. It's from my heart. I cant bring myself to spend ages over adjusting things, I just feel compelled to get the words down and post them straight away.
This is fun, even though the topic is sad. It made me wonder how many people would look up what an infinitive is or the meaning of intransitive. (although I must say I tend to use them frequently being a bossy mother...lol) I'm sure not many will remember beyond the language nerds. Clever use of grammatical terms and homophones to highlight the split of a relationship and being left to wander without a direct purpose. It it in the last line that we see the real tragedy of your meaning.
While love makes good poetry, the loss of it adds a whole new dimension to a writers work. One of these days I want to find the time and energy to crank poems out like you do.
Jan
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you for your kind review, Jaycee...
funny, i don't really have much time at all.. read morethank you for your kind review, Jaycee...
funny, i don't really have much time at all, teaching 6 classes along with other obligations....but i just tend to write within the crevasses of that life...and for me, much like it was for Frank O'Hara, they just sort of pour out in bunches, usually...
i appreciate your in-depth reviews.
j..
8 Years Ago
I find I usually spit out one or two, or go on a writing spree and then nothing for a bit. I always.. read moreI find I usually spit out one or two, or go on a writing spree and then nothing for a bit. I always find our different processes fascinating.
Lol ... you sounds being funny thou' evocative as well .. at the same time .. with words. Nicely swung! I like how you gathered the whole s***s of word & well shaped & turned into something poetic and so philosophical reading. Amazing. Enjoyed reading it for sure!
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..