the theater of you

the theater of you

 

 

 

needed some elbow room

for my heart,

squeezed out of the aisle of love

 

you saved my seat,

but i got detained at the concession stand

made too many, trying to hold onto you

 

now i  have you at arm's length

and my bones are aching

part of me wants that suffocating feeling back

 

because in actuality

i was breathing much steadier then

even if the heartbeats

were much shorter and quicker..

 

the poetry exhaled

in temperate words

and the popcorn tasted better

with your shoulder leaning against mine.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/31/15

Reviews

[Corset]

That's why women invented man caves, gotta have that breathing room, all the way around.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

:)
thank you, Corset...
j.

[KWP]

and she really never knew just how lucky she was .... a shoulder is always better than a vacant space between X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KWP...

j.

[Alisa Js]

Sometimes in relationships, space is needed and necessary...it's only then, that we can objectively ascertain if that space was really needed, or....if we were fine as we were.

Nicely done.

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is true, Alisa....very true.

j.

[...]

Oh Jacob....this is deeply touching...heart achingly so. perhaps strange to say this, but I find it beautiful :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.

j.

[rubie]

i always get a stomach ache when i try to eat all that popcorn by myself....

what a perfectly executed metaphor! and the play on "concession"....yes, i understand that.

wonderful piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rubie.

j.

[AYVID N]

A very enjoyable read with amazingly deep emotions expressed in interesting metaphors.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, DIVYA, appreciate your kind words.

j.

[Julia Ledo]

Loved the last two lines here. Everything always seems nicer when youre sharing it with someone you care about

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julia...

j.

[dan]

jacob, all I can think of to say is Wow! The metaphor of the movie theater experience fits so well with the feelings elucidated in the write. Because popcorn always tasted better with a 'her' on my arm. Great write! take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, dan.

j.

[icelandicblue]

The concession stand is a jewel of a line jacob! You are able to capture emptiness with such skill. The bright lights when you step out of the theater are usually incredibly harsh and yet we seem to acclimate ourselves and hope that there is a blockbuster just waiting around the corner.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, anne...

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh that fear of commitment... wanting to be with someone but scared of losing who we are in the process.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dale.

j.