Only Loud Enough Not to Hear the Raindrops

 

Only Loud Enough Not to Hear the Raindrops

 

docile danger

she's got stormy eyes

lightning heart

a fine girl with severe voice

playing heartbreak in my ear

like i'm wearing headphones

blasting the dark wood

outside my window's whisper

 

trusted temptress

she's got my eyes blind

the trees are down

and i'm hearing a strange rustling

 

must be the cracks

that pin me between flashes

of a brilliance

i only imagined existed

between us.

 

 

erin-cilberto

422/11

Reviews

[rubie]

love the last stanza. packs quite a punch.

sometimes, our imagination paints a much brighter picture than what reality is.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rubie.

j.

[writing mojo]

what a re-gift to us! Your soul in tightly boxed words that at desperate times
wants to explode across the page. excellent piece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, writing mojo.

j.

[cycy]

docile danger
she's got stormy eyes

you have such a rare gift of going with the most uniquely intriguing titles. enjoyed this one and the first line just sealed the deal..well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, cycy

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Best to stay with the imagined brilliance, oh the shine, the shine that lights on you. The remainder, well, it's just a lie.

See you next time Jacob!

Regards,

Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[Cassie]

hahaha.....You write so well you guy!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind, Cassie...thank you.
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Then I guess she and this poem both have the haunting ability to be a siren. There are lines within this tear me down and make me rustle like those leaves. Most invigorating!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Queenie...

j.