adjunct creed

adjunct creed

pasty white smiles

sheets of disintegration

ugly flames with tips of

torn blue blasphemy

love is covered in darkness

vision escapes through slits of judgment 

dominant pupils

stand at the head of a class

that has learned nothing

forgets the kindergarten concept

of recess where everyone plays together

it's a cold war

all the pristine ashes in a jar

of mirrored glass

but the reflection

muted with hate.

erin-cilberto

10/20/15

Reviews

[rubie]

wonderful use of metaphor.

as teachers often find moments of doubt and despair, so do we as human beings when we look at the world around us. it is our classroom, and we have stopped learning from it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such insight...you are amazing.

j.

[rubie]

thank you, my friend. but my comments are inspired by your work, which is what's really amazing here.

[B. Boileau]

How soon the elite sometimes forget as children we were taught to share.
what a wonderful world this could be if we all remembered the concept of recess. A beautiful thought.
bill

[jacob erin-cilberto]

bill,

your response to this poem is a wonderful concept...if only it could become a reality...sharing and caring could bring us all closer...

j.

[B. Boileau]

One can only dream my friend

[marcus]

I'm sensing ... a teacher fed up with his class? or the disintegration of our future? Either way I liked it!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting...thank you for your thoughts...maybe the second idea closer to where i was with this...but either fits well...thank you, marcus.

j.

[Zachary]

Love the energy of this and the melancholia that it brings. Utopia does not exist yet there are some of us who try not to sit in judgement of the world around us. You raise questions with your words, and I like it very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Zachary--

j.

[Jeannette Lunete]

A reflection of society with an aftertaste that makes the blues come out of the ones that are not seekers of comphor on a egocentric and dry level of existence. Enjoyed it greatly, as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jeannette,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Judgement...it is all around us and powerful. The Cold War ended a long time ago, but the ashes of it still spark on a daily basis. Our world is about to combust and I don't pretend to know the answer to it all. Your social consciousness shines here. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.
j.

[ANTO]

Thought provoking words Jacob
1% of the population owns more than all the rest combined.
horrible

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, ANTO...
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

London bridge has fallen....I am appalled that "Grown Ups" can't get in line, give in and share their bounties, or remember a collective teaching...It's a cold war....and they have fire in their eyes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your insight, Queenie.
thank you for your words,

j.

[RomaJ]

Arrogance and vanity breeds a
collective of egos looking for selfish gratification. pretty much sums up quite the cesspool of politicians. haha great piece, Jacob. I still have to ponder this write. Your metaphors are addictive and laden with sweet mystery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Roma

j.