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my heart's been kicked 

in its symmetrical shin

and now it is lyrically limping

with a dull ache of apostrophe

a Dickinson's dead perspective

 

the grave of the garrulous gumption

i used to have,

but now this speaker is shy enough syllables

to complete his rhythm

and he's dancing in front of you

awkwardly moving as a manifestation

 

of the ghost he used to be

when our spirits cut the poetic rug

as one

 

and love was still an idea

in gestation.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/6/15

Reviews

[rubie]

oh, the agony and the ecstasy of love....

this piece is one of the best i've read recently.....perfection.

[icelandicblue]

The before...the reality...and the after, it seems all things great and small have an almost predictable pattern. I like cutting the poetic rug...a lost idiom I think for some.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Anne.
j.

[annalysiar]

Its captivating short and to the point

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, annar.

j.

[annalysiar]

You're welcome

[Nancy Kathleen]

From beginning to end. my heart has bee n captured by this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Nancy....for your kind words.

j.

[Adam Adams]

Guess, you've read Emily's "465" and "712" verse quite deeply that further inspired you to get bled with such deepen words. Very deep and poetically beautiful write it is. So many things you capture in few lines . . .every thought of yous's nice shimmered unto the page. Wonderful work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Adams.

j.

[KeeD]

love sounds like a journey and you''re one of the best guides to experience the journey with. Your words are a glimpse into the roller-coaster of emotions that is love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kee.

j.

[ms. barrie]

Stunning write...your words are memorizing...
& speaks eloquently of [I agree] disillusionment...
Always a pleasure to 're visit your writings, jacob
thank you for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Barrie.

j.

[Philip Muls]

Nostalgia to a time when love was still possible, 'still an idea in gestation'. When there was drive and gumption, when you could dance without limping and awkwardness.

It speaks to disillusionment, to loss of hope. But yet, the speaker is still speaking and the dancer still dances.

Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Philip...
j.

[Alisa Js]

This one is so sad, but full of powerful emotion!

Alisa💫

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Alisa.

j.

[Corset]

man that smarts, when the heart gets kicked in the shin and the speaker dances anyway, there is just something so brave about that, I love to watch you be brave Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset.

j.