like unknown soldiers

like unknown soldiers

 

 

feedback leaves

left un-raked

unidentified

colors absorbed

in wet autumns

 

the epiphany of mortality's flight

there are no answers,

 

only questions burning

with the fall smoke

 

we all fall down, eventually

some without a word spoken

then lie there uncomfortably

 

wishing we had been found

among those who could have

identified us as evolving

from a certain tree.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/15/15

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'.. the epiphany of mortality's flight ' - near heard the sigh after that..

There's something about the Fall, Autumn, that in spite of its glorious colours, it creates a panic, a feeling that the fallen, scattered leaves represent absolute death. But as leaves can nourish, as memories and experiences, so life continues in its variables and colours. Never quite known why fate took so many of my/our loved ones away in the Fall until i realised that meant they could be somewhere, brushes in hand, painting green leaves for the following Spring.

You write in English, yet your language is multi dimensional here, jacob. Guess your reviewers, friends, can interpret in different ways for different reasons, smiling, crying, nodding. Thank you so much for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review and always exquisite insights, emma

j.

[Relic]

After reading this several times I don't see it so much as a life and death kind of thing as much as missed opportunities to communicate. Key words like feedback, unidentified, burning with the fall smoke, without a word spoken and so on. The last lines are like saying you wouldn't even recognize me for who I was?

Like dead soldiers.... Those who died (metaphorically) in a relationship.

Just my deluded interpretation. Good one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your "deluded" interpretation...quite insightful actually....

j.

[paddy d daly]

Man i'v been office line for a few years now, but your work
still inspores me, hope to post something soon and maybe see what you think..o

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, paddy

j.

[B]

Casualty and injury
It can happen outside war grounds
The wounded many by so much in life
and some us die while we are alive

Only someone really clever and super sensitive notices any of this

Amazing J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really appreciate your insights, Nisreenaa.

j.

[NeiL ArandA]

I see many unmarked grave site of many fallen soldiers during the civil war. Some planted a tree besides their grave. An oak or cedar that lasts for centuries. During fall season leaves do fall. Some rake and gather it for compose but some rather prefer it to be burn. I felt sadness here Jacob and yet that is all the fate of the living whether they are great or small. Whether they are known or well known. Once they fall like grass that decompose on the ground or burned. Its all gone and the people living doesn't remember them anymore but only perhaps by those whom they have touch when they were still a young shoot or a bright green tender leaves...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Neil..

j.

[Jamestown]

Great work as always J!
We will most definitely fall, just pray its a soft landing:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jamestown.

j.

[Gee]

Well Jacob there is nothing surer than this,my funeral will be attended by mourners with amnesia,but those that do remember me will be digging out the I O U's kept over the years for anything from a cuppa sugar to a lend of their woman.Top notch writing,but hey,if it wasn't it wouldn't be yours.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review and the smile, Gee.
j.

[alifeacoustic]

A beautifully captured thought, on how Autumn/Fall comes round to us all eventually. Superb Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, alife.
j.

[....................]

what a great description of falling leave, like fallen soldiers, never to be identified...happy autumnal equinox, my friend and thanks for allowing your words to fall onto the page for at least we can identify their origins :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, FT. appreciate your kind reviews.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, sooner or later we all fall down. When we do, all we really want is for someone to recognize us and help us back up. We need to be loved....remembered. Human nature expressed so well. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi...

j.