aftertaste

aftertaste

 

 

even with several dashes of salt

over the shoulder of love,

the spice tempered,

the luck run out

 

violet template

passion's pages

wiped clean

 

a white out insistence

a strange distance

 

the silence shaken

over a meal of resistance

 

and now a bland stance

taken,

 

love's flavor

past the due date

of existence

 

no recompense

the endings all seem the same.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/13/15

Reviews

[Nico Reznick]

An aptly employed metaphor. Clever wordplay, great rhythm and a slick polish.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Nico..

j.

[Relic]

Sometimes love has been tainted and will never be good. Who knows what went on before the due date. Some people never even notice or look for them do they?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true...thank you, Tim.

j.

[rubie]

even spices have expiration and "sell-by" dates. you can use them after that date, but the taste will no longer tickle your tongue or excite your senses.

wonderful metaphor.

because i try to be the eternal optimist, i still believe that the last line is not always true....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i try too....thank you, rubie.

j.

[Valentine]

I really like the ideas you used when composing this. Well done. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kathie.

j.

[....................]

when love's lost it's flavour no amount of spice or salt will make it palpable...why is it that so many relationships have best before dates?...a relatable and well-written piece, my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, FT.

j.