aftertaste

aftertaste

 

 

even with several dashes of salt

over the shoulder of love,

the spice tempered,

the luck run out

 

violet template

passion's pages

wiped clean

 

a white out insistence

a strange distance

 

the silence shaken

over a meal of resistance

 

and now a bland stance

taken,

 

love's flavor

past the due date

of existence

 

no recompense

the endings all seem the same.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/13/15

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

If we stop taking or tasting something I wonder if over time we loose the ability to taste or does the flavour wane.?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we might, Neil...
j.

[...]

Once something is stale or freezer burnt seasoning don't really work. Time to go shopping, or hunting...see your metaphorical brilliance hasn't missed a beat :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lynn.
j.

[~]

The problem with taste buds is that they build their own memories, and we can always know when something has expired or not..
sometimes the expiration was written in fine tiny letters.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, my friend.

j.

[Indra Neil]

brilliant metaphors in this allegoric brevity! well done! *claps*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Indra, appreciate your words.

j.

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome! :)

[Brittany Bostic]

You have a truly impeccable way with words. I hope to accomplish something of that measure one day. I love "past the due date of existence".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Brittany.

j.

[coffeedigest]

Wonderful piece! I love the last line "The endings all seem the same." I think it summed up the poem extremely well. Great job!

Josh

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Josh

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I can relate to those endings. In fact dogs seem to be my speed. I'm almost ready to bag another future meals like the one served here.

Can I offer you a brandy for that aftertaste Jacob?

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al...:)))

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

definitely felt something in this one. i like the structure which delivers images in punching fashion. thanks for writing this. something to digest

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Joshua.
j.

[Wraith.]

'even with several dashes of salt
over the shoulder of love'

Love this.
Unfortunately despite our rituals and stubborn grip we are powerless at the best of times.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we are, Wraith.

thank you....

yes, we are.

j.

[Jamestown]

Fantastic write great metaphor use :)
I wish you weren't right but unfortunately
love does take a bland stance sometimes,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jamestown.

j.