The Humpty-Dumpty Effect

The Humpty-Dumpty Effect

 

 

rocks

      and rain

 

 

                 glistening intentions

                       stationary

                  looks and regrets

 

 

 

and tears left falling over the stone face

 

 

of a boy who now wonders why he didn't make the move then

 

 

.......every time he stands in a rain

and remembers slogging through hesitation

 

 

too slowly to catch her

as she was falling just out of his reach.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/28/13

Reviews

[Terpsichore]

Know the effect well; and that a missed opportunity always remains in the memory. T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing how you related...

j.

[Shae]

Love the title because it definitely lured me in. I believe I too have experienced the Humpty -Dumpty Effect lol, I've always been a hesitant sort. Keep up the magic Erin :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Shae.

j

[andrew mitchell]

I use to kick myself from shyness, not making a move that was open to question a second to catch her at that moment offered then too late, the fear of rejection! I love this write J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing how you relate, andrew...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

It kind of had that fable tale feel as another one gets away.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, she did...oh those crushes we never acted upon...thank you,Al..

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Sadly, it's why I have hit the pavement so many times...well it feels like many...Thank God, I learned to bounce :) She is never outta your reach!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Queenie...

j.

[rubie]

i always find that poems or stories that resonate with "what ifs" are always so haunting to me, because i have such intimate experience with that feeling.....

really tugs at the heartstrings for me.

always bittersweet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, rubie.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Intentions....the might have beens and should have beens of our lives....tend to haunt us. What if you had caught her? How would your life have been different? Unfortunately, no way to know for sure. He who hesitates is lost....too true. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Lydi.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

What man has not lived this moment, and then had to lived with the litany of shoulda beens and what ifs that rain upon us afterward? Elegantly expressed, and a shining example of how form can complement the words to elevate a piece's impact.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, W.k.

j.

[olla]

it was the same for us girls.. but we had to learn to hide it because girls were not suppose to make any moves..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, olla, glad to hear it is on the other side, also.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

man i can relate ..i was the consummate shy guy and also terrified ;) not a good combination to catch the girl ... wonderful reading for me ..title adds to the tale in a circuitous route .. the stones, and rain and tears and stone face ... great stuff for me .. vivid and lots of my own feelings conjured ..nice one as always jacob!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words and sharing how you relate...E.

j.