Overnight Stay

Overnight Stay

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Overnight Stay

 

 

 

blissful lodging

hotel heartthrob

 

shutters closed now

Vacancy sign blinking

like the cold eye of winter,

snowbound love puts out "do not disturb" sign

ice machine maturation, abandonment in the hallway

of echoed exuberance 

 

 

register full of regret

opened to the page

of your signature,

and yesterday's luxury suite

we shared as one

 

today, there are too many rooms available

and i can't find you in any of them.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/22/15

© 2015 jacob erin-cilberto


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I LOVE this write … it achieves that illusive literary air of say the Postman Always Rings Twice. I can you see you played by Jack Nicholson … so easily. He isn't as handsome … but he can act it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

oh you are so sweet, "not as handsome" ha...
thank you for your kind words,

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Pryde Foltz

9 Years Ago

Yeah … I doubled checked you are more handsome:)
Such a bleak scene you take us to with your intricate imagery....I could almost hear that vacancy sign buzzing because it was running out of neon! The romantic longing is strong and the metaphor is super! Lydi**

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.
Such a lonely ending. Loved it as usual

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Cassie...

j.
Jacob, I pictured some abandoned run-down hotel that sits in a shadow of its former glory. Not sure if that is what you were going for, but that is the image that was running through my mind. Excellent imagery! I've missed readying your words. Great job! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

I like that interpretation, Anne...

very cool...

j.
this is excellent...i was drawn into the room and got expelled by the "do not disturb"...i was disturbed and made to ponder...well done, jacob...

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

thank you for your words, jeannemarie.

j.
I always give my utmost attention to the closing line of a poem, whenever I write one. I think it snares the reader into reading more...sort of like an invitation to a never ending dance.

You lead...and I shall follow.

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Kelly...
and i will word dance with you any time...i love the .. read more
Kelly Scheppers

9 Years Ago

...I think I just melted...thank you!
The last two lines really underlined the sadness of missing

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Corset.
j.
it's the place on 'lonely street', right?...'heartbreak hotel'...it must be part of a chain because i've spent a lot of nights there...great write, Jacob, with some stellar lines: all of them

Posted 9 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

lonely hearts find a new place to dwell....
thank you for your kind review, FT.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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