Overnight Stay

Overnight Stay

 

 

 

blissful lodging

hotel heartthrob

 

shutters closed now

Vacancy sign blinking

like the cold eye of winter,

snowbound love puts out "do not disturb" sign

ice machine maturation, abandonment in the hallway

of echoed exuberance 

 

 

register full of regret

opened to the page

of your signature,

and yesterday's luxury suite

we shared as one

 

today, there are too many rooms available

and i can't find you in any of them.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/22/15

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Lost love portrayed with metaphorical mastery.
Impressive write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, you resurrected an oldie...thank you for the read and words, Jimmy.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Reminds me of a dorm room where I spent a winter day once...long, long ago...she was a college girl and I was a high school kid...it seemed a wild and bold adventure. Such are the high strung days of youth not very often visited from the comfort of my late middle age.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an interesting response...you took me back with your words...yes, those high strung days of youth...thank you, Fabian.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

(today, there are too many rooms available and i can't find you in any of them.) Too much of this going on in this frenzied materialistic world....and too many who will relate all too well. Bravo on capturing the scene my friend. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Sharon.

j.

[rubie]

perfect metaphor.

kind of reminds me of "too many rooms"....only yours is so much better..lol

but the point is, i know this feeling of vacancy all too well....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review....but i really liked "too many rooms"---

j.

[Roland Petrov]

Ah, what an excellent analogy! It can also be read literally, and that way it's rather touching. Lovely poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Roland.

j.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

'Love don't live here anymore'.
The funny thing is, even when it doesn't live there anymore it's a bit like Hotel California.
It never really leaves. Really like this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your reply, Cherry...it is clever, even though i hate that song...:)))

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Lol. Yeah, that song and stairway to heaven. I can do without ever hearing them again.

[~]

Nothing else but the echoes of the relationship. The heartbreak hotel where things have passed and the present holds nothing but a ruinous memory.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, moonskittles...
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When people grow apart emotionally it can be like living in to different hotel rooms.
Great analogy Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dale...

j.

[Relic]

I love the way you create a theme and stick to it. There's an immense sadness in this for me. Those empty rooms and regretful register must have done it. The loneliness echoes down the halls and I can feel it. Excellent writing Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Tim...

j.

[Alisa Js]

Breakups are a b***h!😓

And yet, the world turns...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, so true :)))
thank you my friend...I guess I need my "Guiding Light" ha ha.