a menu of malfeasance

a menu of malfeasance

 

 

you convey refined neglect

courteous insult of silence

 

i reset the table of emotions

with backward diligence

and forward glance

 

but you still refuse proper placement

of happenstance,

a napkin of nimble notice

 

never reaches the lap

of endearment

 

and once again

i sit alone

politely imbibing

my glass of nothing.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/22/15

Reviews

[LapseOfMind]

Wonderful job! A well thought out and put together piece. A lot said in such few words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lapse...

j.

[rubie]

terrific metaphor, as usual.

wonderful title too.

dining etiquette goes out the window with emotional indifference.

i hope you did not make reservations at this restaurant.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no...i got the order to go :))))

thank you, rubie.

j.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

killer alliteration. very well put

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Joshua...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I am so sorry for the neglect...I will never let it happen again:) LOL How often we lack the realization that we are consistently in need or want of others, yet we don't often take their need or want into perspective. I have only ever been stood up for dinner once ( I am a good cook...and not a bad date) but it hurts as much as all the times I was stood up as a lover or emotionally as a partner. Excellent write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this review...thank you, Queenie.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"My glass of nothing" well, that says it all, doesn't it? The table of emotions, once set incorrectly, can not be realigned. The metaphors you use in your poetry keep me coming back for more. Wonderful. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Lydi...thank you for your words.

j.

[MsJewel]

I love your use of metaphor in this sad and realistic little gem Jacob. "a napkin of nimble notice" - brilliant
So sad when there is nothing left but silence....

Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Julie.

j.

[Terry O'Leary]

An interesting poem...
an intriguing style...
very nice!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Terry.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

The turns of phrase are simply wonderful here--"a napkin of nimble notice", "politely imbibing/my glass of nothing". It's all an all-too-rare quality for writing to be spare in the best sense of the word.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are always so kind in your reviews of my work, W.k.
and I thank you...

j.

[Dhaye]

Refined neglect...courteous insult...because silence sounds louder and cuts deeper than a word of anger spoken. Being ignored creates deeper wounds.

Smart piece once again. Thank you for sharing, sir. My mind is honed in thinking and analyzing your metaphors though I am not sure if I hit everything right but that's how I view your poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really enjoy your views on my poems, Dhaye...

thank you.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

This is quite of feast on the table of manners and mores. Your talent is simply brilliant.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you are very kind with your review, Al..
thank you

j.