on the third day

on the third day

 

 

saccharine Sunday

at the blues farm,

field of thoughts ready to be plowed

benign vessels of sweetened, soulful intimations

 

early rising themes greet the sun with contentment

a lighter shade of words

seeps through the blinds

and the moon rings of night slowly disappear

 

like those repetitive tear drops

that passed for yesterday's rain

in a heart ready to harvest

a renaissance of vindicated vocabulary

 

to imbue the day

with resurrected smiles.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/22/15

Reviews

[rubie]

i really love how the title is reflective of the biblical motif....

you have that rare ability to write with equal skill, whether your tone is mournful or uplifting. i love that.

great write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, rubie.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

a renaissance of vindicated vocabulary

to imbue the day
with resurrected smiles.

:( i was riding favorable winds ..drifting in gentle warm currents with my porpoise posse' ..
then i hit those lines ... seems a gentle heart and thoughts divine turned an abrupt shade of ??? something not so sunny! ... wow!
the mingling of metaphors and Christian belief is masterful! .. and there are things hiding in between those lines says i! ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

"like those repetitive tear drops..that passed for yesterday's rain"

Wow..softly sad..then hope-full ......

A Wonderful Write....

Jazz

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jazz.

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

I corrected my comment...................... and..You Are Welcome..

[Pryde Foltz]

Everyday is a new one … every moment is a new one … rebirth should get a grin at least. Fabulous write, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Pryde.

j.

[MsJewel]

I love the hopeful feel of this one Jacob
a lighter shade of words
seeps through the blinds
and the moon rings of night slowly disappear
brilliant imagery

:) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julie...
j.

[Kelsey Ann]

The last two lines are simply beautiful! Great job! :D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelsey Ann.

j.

[W R Stowe]

The cross is empty because we celebrate a resurrected Savior and the third day he arose fitting title Jacob

Bill

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you,, Bill....

j..

[W R Stowe]

you're welcome Jacob I arrive Amtrak tomorrow 945 am then have to go kill a few hours until check in time at Elk Grove take the blue line to O'Hare after brunch l guess

Bill

[Alfred Kukitz]

The farm of emotions and inner workings of a human being presented in religious metaphor. Quite brilliant!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[NeiL ArandA]

Awesome Jacob all your words are so original and you expertly use metaphor in every subject you desire .I wish I could do that with such ease as you ....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Neil...

j.

[....................]

the poet, sipping coffee, after a long night in the tomb of memories, smiles at the harvest of thoughts, now sitting on the page... the death of love, perhaps, resurrected with the sun, given new life...brilliant use of biblical metaphor

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, FT.

j.