a slight disturbance

a slight disturbance

 

 

dust mites

soul mates

to the breeze

as it rearranges the evidence

that she was once here

 

love is a "Pledge"

and that end table may rediscover its shine

but will never again cast her reflection

 

in the pain stained wood,

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/113/15

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

And pledge is over rated...
Dust with just a cloth-and love fills the air landing fleetingly
Dust love with a damp rag and it ,well it molds
How about letting the dust alone? Let it build on the table
No one will have a reflection but love will have a forever home
You can write names in it -dust mite memories
Super Good Morning Fine Sir , Dusty Holly

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hey Dusy Holly, thank you for your insightful words,

j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'A slight disturbance''
erin cilberto,
Well this was one more reminder that nothing stays the same in this life. I think that being able to bend with these changing winds takes great courage. Relationally as in this poem it speaks to the pain of your 'slight disturbance.' That was different. Well thanks for the openness once again within your ability to share the difficulties in this life with just a little grace which softens.
Bless you as always,
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for getting this one out of the attic and dusting it off with your very kind words,
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

It was surly worth the search and not to dusty after all! Take care Chris and I wish you yuletide beauty

[FaeryQueen]

greeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you.

j.

[rubie]

Terrific and clever word play here, my friend....

Those nicks and scars and signs of age in a table are the battle scars of its life, add to a different kind of luster....

So it is with love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rubie.

j.

[Blotted Ink Productions]

How bittersweet. You can polish it up, but it probably won't ever be the same as it was when it was new...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, my friend.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

A nice write jacob So many material things like wood tables, furniture and walls all have stories to be told if only lol. Yes dust mites would rearrange the microscopic litter we create, a little meal!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

You are welcome, there may be no reflections but we are left with impressions!

[Corset]

I loved the thought of dust mites being soulmates to the breeze, it couldn't get much better than that

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Corset.
j.

[Ana B.]

a very fitting title, what is love if it doesn't give some chills, or a sour after taste..... a marvellous write Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana.

j.

[Adam Adams]

Oh.. how beautiful romantic & philosophical words you've used to please even your own write with romanticized words. Lovely, it's to read such pieces that directly comes from the bottom of writers' hearts & dapple the tints of love-incenses 'pon worlds. Excellent work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Adams.

j.

[Kelsey Ann]

Wow. Great poem! Had to read on to understand the meaning of "Pledge". I love the metaphor. 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kelsey Ann,

j.