angling for the elusive

angling for the elusive

 

 

thoughts still water

into coagulation,

the print fuses in my mind

like a pond at dusk

only a ripple or two of inspiration

produces the slightest swirl

 

and then is gone

before i can throw a line

onto the page.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/8/15

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob, you caught me at the
end, after nibbling on your lure of
a whisper of a ripple at dusk. We
spend time under a shade tree where
families fish until the bewitching hour
where ripples and swirls kiss the waves
of canoes returning from secret inlet
coves of inspiration. I found your poem
to be a keeper. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind, metaphoric reply, Pat.

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome dear poet... We can all be
Fishers of men.... to encourage and shower with love.
Amen... truly. Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

I can relate! Inspiration comes quickly and then leaves just before the words can be written...a sort of poem interuptus! :) You, though, throw many a line on the page. Good one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi

j.

[Roxie M]

Writing about not being able to write. This is so far my favorite poem by you. Rather than say more, for I cannot do this poem justice, I simply will read again. Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Roxie.

j.

[Valentine]

I thought 2 ways on this one. How I feel when the mind blanks, and also how my husband, an avid fisherman must have felt when he had the big one on and couldn't bring it in. Coming up empty hurts. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really enjoy your responses, Kathie,

thank you,
j.

[W.k.kortas]

Ah, to be one of those people who can bring poetry all Athena-like springing fully formed from their heads. This is a wonderfully spun and tightly executed metaphor, such things so much your speciality that we may need to start referring to them as "erin-clibertos".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too kind, W.k.--

thanks for your words,

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I remember these moments, a flash upon an instant, bewildering when that chance fades into eternity.

Nice write!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,Al.
'
'j.

[jeannemarie coulter]

beautiful write that captures that search we all share

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, jeannemarie,

j.

[escherflight]

but that is your line, thrown, and you got a bite with this one!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, escherflight

j.