"When Goodbye is the "B" Side of Love

When Goodbye  is the "B" Side of Love

 

 

when you cut me loose

my only severance pay 

was a note that echoed so shrill

it broke my eye.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/6/15

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

A powerfully brief write that all that need be said of a broken eye (obviously the other poked right the fluck out of gouged?) that left your heart high and dry of about as low as it can go for any man, woman, or Human Being ... As always, my friend, I leave your pages touched and inpsired ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind review, Marve,
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jacob erin-cilberto,
"When goodbye is the "b" side of love"
Four lines above, lyrics to the "other side" of caring. Which side are we in now- process of leaving? Does the end have to hurt?
Life can be complex and this poem gave one more aspect to this wonderful challenging reality.
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you again, Kathy, for reviving some of these older pieces---appreciate your words,
j.

[Érenn]

Wow this is such a good read. The brevity of it makes this write even more solid. Love the title you have used here. The cassette has both A and B sides. Well unlike the opera singer whose high note can break glass the shrill note of goodbye can break a lot more than just an eye here. Lovely write enjoyed it thoroughly ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Errenn...i still have so many vinyl albums and 45's---was always big on those flip sides of the 45's----thanks for your insights.

j.

[rubie]

so glad you did not ditch this one....

i love the word play. it's clever and subtle.

so many times, i thought of the "b" side as a sort of hidden treasure, an undiscovered country of sorts...
sometimes it was a dud, but other times, it was better than the "a" side...

so it is with goodbyes...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, rubie.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

eeeeeeeeeeyouch! it broke me eye!!! yeowwwww! perfect ... nothing that wants changing ... except maybe the severance ; /
on the flip side ... there are some spectacular b hits ... love your poem!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i have some favorite flipsides......."love of my life" by the everly brothers is maybe the best ever------great song....but then some are hard to listen to---

thank you for your words s E.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ...most are very hard to listen to ...no doubt about it ... have a great day jacob ...

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the B side....the ones no one really could sing along with...the ones everyone wanted to forget. Indeed, the B side of romance is heartbreak. Great metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...

j.

[Fran Marie]

I liken love relationships as heads and tales..winning or losing ..there seems to always be a flip side ..for better or worse..like the play on words ..a very cool write as always..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran Marie.

j.

[Roxie M]

There have been times the "B" side was so much better than the "A" side. Sometimes the "B" side plays well for its melodic meaning, at other times for its beat...A or B, being set free, harshly or kindly, either means you are free! I hear the blues, I hear the jazz.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Roxie.

j

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ouch...i like the play on words here, Jacob...i hear the needle scraping across the LP and the crack in the eye isn't the result of a sweetly held note...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, your words might just have saved this piece from the trash heap---i was about to toss it, figuring it wasn't even worth a comment...thought the play on words might be too cryptic or something...

this poem just got a reprieve and will stay up on the board a bit longer.

[....................]

Phew, so happy I was able to come online when I did, then... I don't think they are too cryptic and if one reads carefully enough, in context, he/she should be able to see it clearly :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and it didn't need to be figured out, cause i never expect that...i just figured it wasn't provoking any reaction at all....so thanks, FT.
for the time being, it stays.

j.

[....................]

I think sometimes, many feel inept to respond because they feel they might not get it right... but you are right, it's never about that, it's about simply reacting!