pasteurized

pasteurized 

 

 

stalled sentiments

stanchioned thoughts of love

not fed, just trapped

in suspension

 

milked heart for all its worth

now in dry pasture scheming

 

how to find the door to her barn

once again,

so she'll notice and not just count

me 

one of the herd

she's already sold for beef.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/4/15

Reviews

[Ananke]

I adore this. There is a lot of "meat" to this short poem..."One of the herd she's already sold for beef"...It made me think of the adage "why buy the cow when he can get the milk for free". To me, it reflects a neat reversal of some common gender roles and it was refreshing to see it from the male/ beef cattle perspective.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ananke...

j.

[Corset]

I love the play on the word pasteurized, as if "put out to pasture", pasture-ized..oh gawd that is so perfect Jacob. I thought of one the other day but promptly forgot it, my dad said that I do not have alls- timers memory loss just some-timers, lol, gotta love that Leo wit!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is too funny...and thank you for your words on my piece, Corset..

j.

[Corset]

you're very welcome Jacob
C.

[...]

I love your sarcasm :) Sometimes even when they aren't meant to be funny, your clever sarcasm makes them that way to me, but I deal with criminals for a living and a sarcastic sense of humor is a must

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I bet it is...thank you for your words....what do you do?

j.

[...]

I was a corrections officer for 17 years. Gave that up when they privatized and now I am what they call a support specialist for a private company dealing with criminals who are out and have mental disorders cope in society

[Alfred Kukitz]

I certainly have my fingers crossed for you. In the meantime enjoy my compliment for a fine poem.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Al.

j.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Excellent piece Jacob.
Looking for redemption as the greener pastures no longer seem greener and wanting to be on the right side of love again. Just my thoughts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your keen insights, Cherry.

[....................]

oh, being put out to pasture does not make for happy grazing...but how bad do we have it for the one who does that to us when we find ourselves scheming to get back inside the barn?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, FT.

j.

[Roxie M]

Well Done! Please. Sabor au mi and the word clabber come to mind while reading this clever poem. It also reminds me of a poem I wrote clarified butter as a metaphor or simile. If I am able to find it, I will post it. Thank you for sharing your exceptional talent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Roxie...
j.

[jeannemarie coulter]

so she'll notice and not just count
me
one of the herd
she's already sold for beef.

you opened the barn doors to sunny meadows with this one...love the word tapestry, jacob, well penned indeed with just a touch of humor...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words jeannemarie---
j.

[Sami Khalil]

The beef market, the dry pastures and the milking of the last drops of love. An excellent poem of metaphors...:)........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Sami.

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:).........................

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow.....when a woman casts men aside as if she is selling them for parts, well, perhaps it is time to lose the directions to the barn door! Another good metaphor. It never ceases to amaze me how many good poems you are able to write, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...as i always say, though...i am not sure where they come from....i feel more like a conduit---the words, come from somewhere, and i just write them down....can't say i can take responsibility...
but thank you for your kind words.

[Lydia Shutter]

It's all smoke and mirrors! :)