beyond a reasonable doubt

beyond a reasonable doubt

 

 

escape the monocle of the past

evade evidence that purloins the future

evolve within the present,

 

love is awaiting

to be creating 

symmetry syncopating 

 

when you pirouette within

placate your heart 

probe into hers,

 

with an open mind

happiness could become

an open and shut case

 

 

solved 

by sated

soul mates.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/1/15

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

Herein lies wisdom and hope for that light, that spark which becomes flame, to return to one's life, perhaps, as it once was with that one, or with someone totally new ... A very encouraging write ...!

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Marvin,
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jacob erin-cilberto,
"beyond a reasonable doubt'
The title is the meaning threading its way through this excellent write.
"Escape the monicle of the past", "evade evidence that purloins the future" and "evolve within the present"; these three phrases feel like a legal contract which frees the person to say goodbye to all pain and remorse.
Then the bright future is within grasp! "Love is awaiting to be creating", "symmetry syncopating".
Then the fourth stanza holds the word pyroette. This is so childlike and free. Freedom just rings within the heart of this heart song.
Now with an "open and shut case"
"Solved by sated soul mates."
Sounds like the verdict is decided, Love wins!!
Great poem Jacob.
Blessings,
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, on this oldie, Kathy--

appreciate you bringing it back to the board...had forgotten all about it...
hope you are well...
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jacob,
I am well... just seeing life changes and learning along with them. I truly appreciated your poem. It just spoke of some of these changes and moving along with them. I like that!
Blessings to you.

[jeannemarie coulter]

excellent in every way...a delight to read and ponder

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you jeannemarie...
j.

[marcus]

live in the present, and love! I liked this!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, marcus. appreciate your kind words.

j.

[....................]

the opening three words say it all... live in the now, not somewhere else, and do so with verve with the one you love...love this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.

j.

[Cassie]

I could never say it any better. Well said my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Cassie.

j.

[Ken Simm.]

I don't know how you manage to place the information just so to feed the instincts. I just know that I am always awestruck by your ability to do so.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Very well written Jacob as a teacher of poetry should!!! I love the fourth stanza esp the line "an open and shut case" which summed it all up nicely I thought!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

don't know about the should thing...teaching something doesn't necessarily mean we are proficient at it....but thank you for the kind words.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Your writing J is always excellent and tightly formatted!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is kind of you to say, andrew.

j.

[Roxie M]

When I was in my Twenties, I wrote-"You can't see into the future over your shoulder." I laugh now that I knew not where to look! I've lived so much in the future, there is very little left to be had from the present. I especially enjoyed your metaphors-monocle for its limited sight, purloins that steal the future. Also, the dance of the next two verses. Then I am delighted by the clever open and shut case that is beyond a shadow of a doubt...nicely buttoned this up and credit given to sated soul mates. At which, I questioned are we not all soul mates? Or at least could we be? This is not an invitation, just stimulated by your thoughts to brilliantly placed upon the page. Thank you, Poet, Jacob. I cannot resist saying you and one of my grandsons share a name.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Roxie....ah, sharing the name....:)))

j.

[Roxie M]

He is a creative musician, a pain in the neck, argumentative, handsome and 18.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

opposite of me....ha ha...i am certainly not 18.

[Roxie M]

I will not say it, it is bread on the ground, too easy, it can just remain there, nay, I will not pick it up...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha.......

[MOON]

Lovely write to be wholly present and in love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i guess the trick is to be able to be wholly present.

not always easy...

read morei guess the trick is to be able to be wholly present.

not always easy...

thanks, Moon....appreciate your visit.