i'll take a bleeder, straight up

i'll take a bleeder, straight up

 

 

seldom love

innocuous to the heart

infectious longing

just a slight cut

 

no scars,

just tossing down some memories

at the nearest bar

in "on the rocks" splendor

 

so she'll  be farthest from my

 

 mind

by morning.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/29/15

Reviews

[keith]

an oldie perhaps but well worth reading
self explanatory
no frills just fact

enjoyed the read

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for pulling this one out of the attic, angry....
appreciate your words.
read morethank you so much for pulling this one out of the attic, angry....
appreciate your words.
j.

[keith]

my voyage thru your many offerings have only begun

[barleygirl]

Back in my younger days when I tried to toss memories, I found this approach didn't chase those pesky longings & regrets from my mind by morning! *smile* (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for digging up this oldie and for the kind comment, barleygirl...
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Smoke rings,Johnny Walker and melancholy, one step away from the edge...Your poem puts us right on the barstool next to you. Great "sharp" lines and imagery-"I'll take a bleeder straight up."- how evocative is that?! As Frank once crooned, "So, Set 'em up Joe"...and Jacob closed with "toss down some memories". Stellar!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Annette,

j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

erin-cilberto,
I get to enjoy a person's history by reading something of this nature. Let the past go (I think) Is the gist of this one? Great ending; so she'll be furthest from my mind by mornng. The words are spaced to bring a feeling of slow sips of a beverage and a slow release of memory too............? Anywasy this was really interesting to ponder. Bless ya. Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

releasing the memory...yes, slow and tough...
thank you for your kind words, Kathy...

j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

jacob.
Ponder, ponder. We need the processing involved to unearth and view our lives. How many of us actually write for this reason? I think we all have a great deal which we do not show one another which is the journaling, the examining and working through life questions. I see it in myself,so yea.......... Bless you sir. Kathy

[Valentine]

Farthest from the mind come morning because you wake up with a terrible head ache. Can't concentrate with that can you? Valentine [smiling]

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kathie...:)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

There is much residue left at the bottle of a whiskey glass....drinking in some wonderful poetry😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.

j.

[Roxie M]

Nurse, nurse, may I have another! Not harmful to the heart, infectious, slight cut, no scars...call me in the morning! I keep hearing "put the lime in the coconut and drink it all up.' I cannot drink as I once did, Now, when I succumb to alcohol, it is for the memories...wine means love, family, nurturing, romance, great sex, not alone...and if you are, temporary retreat from the pain of loneliness. This is another genius in briefs. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, and the allusion to harry nilsson.....great song...from nilsson shmilsson..."and call me in the morning"

j.

[rubie]

love these poems with the "bar" and "drinks" metaphors....

too often people resort to drinking to numb the brain when the heart's been scarred.

i like the spacing at the end of the poem. nice touch....

well penned....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rubie...appreciate your insights.


j.

[....................]

old memories come to haunt so we wash them down with a few scribbles to free the space in our heads for new ones... guess it's like getting rid of the hangover...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is like that....thank you for understanding....

j.

[Adam Adams]

Pleasure's everywhere even in worst-doing-things.

Your write portrays a very dark sides of someone who needs to soothe his mind, longs to please his heart & yearns for havin' someone close to the spirit for... removing past aches (heart-aches). But... bleeding, drinking & shrinking is not an option but a choice that's merely opt by those whose P-factor (psychological factor) is not strong so they often find please in drugs, drinks, desperation, possession, intimacy & aggression. Very thought invoking write you've come up with. Kinda written full of depths!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Adams...

j.