i'll take a bleeder, straight up

i'll take a bleeder, straight up

 

 

seldom love

innocuous to the heart

infectious longing

just a slight cut

 

no scars,

just tossing down some memories

at the nearest bar

in "on the rocks" splendor

 

so she'll  be farthest from my

 

 mind

by morning.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/29/15

Reviews

[Rijstervlaai]

Generally "just a slight cut" doesn't get into an arterial bleed. They're direct from the heart and not so innocuous. I'm suspecting this guy's trying to minimize a deeper wound. I'm also guessing with morning light she'll still be up in the corner of his bathroom mirror. I figure Aesop would find her the grape and he the fox. Nicely understated write, not between the lines rather underneath them. By the way, a big fat blunt works a whole lot better for forgetting. Alcohol thins the blood and only adds to the loss.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

She probably will be there, no doubt.
thanks for your review,
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

been there ... done that ... most essentially poignant ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Marve,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

sitting at the bar and scoping out the next candidate I imagine

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the speaker wishing he knew better.
thanks, Winston.
j.

[Tate Morgan]

How many times have we all taken a few drinks to forget? Most roads, end in dead ends. We travel them nonetheless that’s life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Tate, thanks dusting this one off, and for your comments...
j.

[Tate Morgan]

You’re welcome

[M. J. Smith]

We think to drown out misery. Thing is, alcohol burns in open wounds. Kills infection. Burns like hellfire. And the wound remains. No one has ever found a good painkiller for a broken heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Maybe Little Big Town...at least that is the title of one of their recent albums...:)

thank you, M.J.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

Drinking our bleeding hearts. Hanging in the over of love. Forgetting yesterday in the morning pain and fog.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Bill,
j.

[BlackRose]

What love will do to a person. When they thought it was true, having hit 'rock' bottom when the other breaks their heart. Never at all a good feeling for sure. Outstanding piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, BlackRose,
j.

[BlackRose]

You're very welcome.
B. R. @,~/:o)

[terry smith]

sometime love gets under your skin...like shoe polish that stains the flesh...for a while

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes it does...so true...
thank you, terry,
j.

[Neville]

Just what you need when you want to forget. Not only delicious but seems to do the trick every time. Hope you feel better now jacub.....Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Neville.

i am doing fine....just a poem.

[Neville]

Hey Jacob, I had no doubt or concerns about your state of health, well-being or indeed your circumstances, in fact I was reasonably sure these words of yours make up a poem, nothing more. If every poem of my own was taken literally, I would be locked up or dead by now and am very much aware that writing often reflects the writers imagination more so than any situation, circumstance or experience he/she may have had or indeed is likely to ever have. All Good Things, Neville