Mall Encounter

A short string-haiku written at the Clackamas Town Center while waiting for my loved one to return.

Spirit in the air
treasures shine in each window
hunts bloom to possess

Waiting for her smile
she prowls for shimmering gold
her return will shine

Mall encounters dawn
to grasp silver fantasies
the thrill of the hunt

Reviews

[Sourav]

I quite liked the concept of this writing. Very different with nice depiction. Well done!

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!

[Leslie Philibert]

This is great,and has intoduced me to the idea of a string-haiku, that I didn`t know..a cracker !

[Eric Cox]

Thank you.
This is a short string haiku, there can be any length to string haikus, another piece of mine has 10 or 12 haikus within it.

[Sami Khalil]

To be honest with you . It is the first poem that I read about a mall or shopping at it . Well penned and unique...:)

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Susie Q]

Anticipation, waiting for your love to return, even at the mall. Just to see her smile after the trill of the hunt, surely must be love. Nice poem!

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!

[Black Cat Fever]

I like this. It has a very positive feel to it, longing, romantic and adventurous too. Good job!

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!

[Black Cat Fever]

meow

[Coyote Song]

Love this one Eric. It has a smooth sort of magical quality to it. I really like how you worked these haiku together. Very romantic, I think.

[Eric Cox]

Thank you! :)

[Coyote Song]

:)

[Tina Kline]

This is really really good. I like the feel of this, peaceful yet full of excitement as the treasures are hunted for and you and your love are reunited. Nice job on this string haiku.

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!!!

[Star Wolf]

Awesome and romantic. I agree with other reviewer, this does have an enchanting feel to it.

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!!!!

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Nicely done. This has a rather enchanting feel to it. A very positive and magical poem.

[Eric Cox]

Thank you!!!!