Suicide Watch (Poem)

Standing at a rooftop,

Ready to jump,

My life will soon be over.

I'm giving everything up.

I look down at the pavement,

Stories beneath my feet,

There's no turning back now,

So I brace myself for eternal sleep.

I am falling ever so slowly,

When I reconsider,

Life could have been great.

Is this really worth my surrender?

I grab onto a window sill,

But my hand slips off.

Save me, God.

Bring me back to the rooftop.

I hit the ground,

Thinking "this is it, this is it"

But God has given me another chance;

Another chance to live.

So here is my lesson...

And please give this some thought:

Don't give up all you have

When you don't know what you've got.

Author's Note

This is based off my screenplay "Suicide Watch" check it out if you liked this :)

Also, I put "God" in there even though I personally don't believe in God.

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

I think it would have been better, my person wording, without "God" since also I do not believe in 'him'. But I do agree with the message and tho I haven't tried this method of doing it, it's well captured. You can see the acrophobia in the speaker too.
Good write

-Marie-

[Love is like the moon]

This is really good. Reading all I could think is that it relates to me, what I thought a couple years back. Very wonderful and put together well. :)

[AndyJCash]

True stuff, and I think the inclusion of God, whether you believe or not, shows the desperation of man in situations like this.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Excellent read :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

I liked it. Well penned and executed.