Wind Chimes

Wind Chimes

A Poem by ericdeben
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The silence is pure, the silence is evil.

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      The silence is pure,
        The silence is evil.
It makes me feel unsure,
But the silence is peaceful.

It makes me wonder,
"What is it like to hear?"
Hear the wind chimes and thunder.
To let peace and evil into my deafened ears?

But it's too late for sound,
The sense has been lost.
Taken by thunder,
The wind chimes are gone.

© 2011 ericdeben


Author's Note

ericdeben
Experimenting with poetry. In this poem, I try to describe the perspective of a deaf person.

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A nice write, man. I dig the concept of the deaf person acknowledging that he or she is deaf and thus allowing said person to become somewhat of a spectator of their own malady. I also like the contrast you present between the light sound of the wind chimes and the heavy sound of thunder.

Overall, a great poem.

Peace,
Brenden

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love it. Be proud.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well I must say it was a good experiment...A very good poem and I think it told a very good POV from a deaf person's POV

Loved the rhyme scheme and flow

Posted 13 Years Ago


I can tell and imagine it so well done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I believe you succeeded in your quest. Excellent poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well captured. The first stanza, in my opinion, is the best. I love how you turn around and contradict what you said in the first line. Because being deaf has to have both been good and bad for the person. Good read

-Marie-

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. You have a nack for poetry.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow. This is a really great poem. You should try to make some more, this is great.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great.... What a feeling and emotions... I salute you... Keep it up!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on August 22, 2011
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Tags: deaf, silence, wind chimes, thunder, storm, experiment

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Some town, MA



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