What Now

This is my first complete poem. its about falling in love while coping with depression.

At first I fought and tried to stay

Separate within my walls

But as we talked each day

I couldn’t stay withdrawn

 

Once you asked me to jump

At the time I couldn’t

But eventually I leaped

Even though I said I wouldn’t

 

You excavated my heart

And broke through my barriers

Saw through and disregarded

My fear and doubt in layers

 

But now we are stuck

And I feel alone and lost

My lighthouse burned so bright

But I’ve lost him in the fog

 

I grieve for what we had

That we drifted apart

I’m all out of courage  

Did I have any to start?

 

I know I am to blame

I wish it wasn’t true

You were my anchor

But I was your cement boot

Author's Note

Please give comments, critiques, tips, and thoughts! I'd really like to hear feedback!

Reviews

[taos]

I really like this poem!! Especially the last stanza; it was... haunting (sorry if you weren't going for that!!!). I loved the imagery of a lone lighthouse, shining desperately in the fog. However, the only recommendation I'd give is to add more imagery, since you seem to do a brilliant job with descriptions. Good job!

[Samaira]

We build walls just to see who would make an effort to break them down. Once we get someone like that, It's hard to let go. You have brought that out well, considering it's your first poem.