Pop Goes the Evil (a Collaboration with noodlehead)

A very dark (and slightly scary) parody of "Pop Goes the Weasel," co-written with noodlehead.

Surviving off the screams he creates,

The Jack-in-the-box at night,

I warn you now, this is no mistake,

Giving kids a fright…

 

Every night when I get home

The clown is on the table,

I knock him to the marble floor

Until he gets unstable…

 

He watches from your window at night

His eyes are full of evil,

The jack-in-the-box will stab you to death,

*slice!* No upheaval.

Author's Note

Photo Credit: Zydeco Antiques

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The way you wrote poem is nice

I like that God all holy power created everything by himself

The message could be that the devil cant do it by itself and neither the puppets demons eyes that are full of demon

[Eric Pudalov]

I always enjoy your interpretations of my poetry, Squinkla. Yes, I was thinking of a demonic Jack-in-the-box, although I think you gave the poem more depth than I intended!

It originally started with me reading one of noodlehead's poems that was a dark nursery rhyme, of sorts. And then I suggested we collaborate on one. But I think sometimes writers can add in unintentional meanings to their poetry as well.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your compliment Eric

I really like your explanation about the poem here "I think sometimes writers can add in unintentional meanings to their poetry as well."

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The image you choose for your poem tells a story itself, I really think you did a good job.

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks again! I think I found that on Google...really creepy photo, huh?

[Eric Pudalov]

oh wow... hmmm don't think I want regular jacks in the boxes at all... I loved the image you placed with it and the short tale was certainly filled with the haunting fear... Very nice job!!!!

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks Nisa!! Isn't that a creepy Jack-in-the-box? I hadn't been on the site in awhile, so your review was a nice surprise.

I am glad I made you smile... I find myself on here a lot for a few weeks and then off as life pulls me away and then I wander back... I really enjoyed the fright and the haunting.. and that image alone is one I'll not forget for a while...

[Einstein Noodle]

spooky!!! last line very spooky .. i never was afraid of the Jack in the box .. always able to anticipate the pop .. i tried to learn to turn the crank to the very last miniscule click .. :)

difficult to match the rhythm/rhyme and keep syntax .. nice job you two!
E.

[TL Boehm]

excellent collab and I think those little Jerks in the Boxes are completely creepy.

[ron]

A very good dark poem. Nice job to the both of you.

[s y e]

Thanks very much Ron. You're much too kind.

[ron]

You both did a great job with this one

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks so much Ron! I hadn't been on here for a few days - this was a nice surprise.

[ron]

You are most welcome. I'm a bit jealous of you Eric :) great write you two.

[Eric Pudalov]

Awww, really? Jealous?? That I wrote a poem with Noodle, or what? I've done a bunch of collabs on here - all I had to do was ask, really!

[ron]

Was joking about being jealous. You both did a great job with it.

[s y e]

Don't be silly Eric, he ain't jealous cause of me or you writing together! Haha

[Eric Pudalov]

Haha! I figured that, but it's hard to tell on the internets sometimes. Perhaps we could collaborate again sometime.

[s y e]

Yes of course, just PM me - I'd love to

[Kai Rollins]

Now that my fears have been picked at....
Still don't regret this. Not gonna lie though, I do have that prickly feeling on my neck...
(That's what this collaboration can do :)

[s y e]

You're my favourite, Kai. Hahaha, thanks very much dude!!!

[kublakhan27]

First off, I'm happy to see a collab from two of my good friends, I wish I'd seen it earlier but I was away for a while...I gotta say, I would never have expected something so dark to come from this pairing, but that's a good thing...very ominous words here, and being a kid that was scared to death of jack-in-the-boxes, I certainly relate...great job guys :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks so much Steve! Ironically, it was noodle that partially inspired this work in the first place. One of her poems was kind of a dark twist on "Rock-a-Bye Baby," and then I had suggested we do a dark nursery rhyme collaboration. I should put a picture of the actual jack-in-the-box that scared the crap out of me as a kid - they're still selling it online!! NOOOOOO!!!

[s y e]

Mwhahaha!!! Eviiiil. Kidding, we love you really Steveroo. Thanks so much. Eric was the heart of this poem, that's for sure. Thanks a lot.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

A bit scary little poem. Nice twist on a classic.

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks Englishman! I take it you're from England, then? Wasn't the original Pop Goes the Weasel composed in England? (I feel as though most nursery rhymes have a dark background anyway!!)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

This is true. I'll try to find the original meaning and let you know.

[s y e]

Thanks very much Mad. Glad you enjoyed our twisted nursery rhyme.