At the Speed of Thought

As the title says, I basically wrote this as fast as I could think - thank you Anika, for the idea!!

madness mesmerizing my frenetic

fertility, tantalizing my tastebuds

with tantric torture.

testerone triads turning

radically into firescapes.

 

festivities of mentality, schizophrenic

sausages, satiated by scathing

scabbards!

 

selectively scandalized in my

burstophenic nature, thought-wreaking

burnotopias into cosmic blast waves.

 

gray becomes reddetic warp-worms,

feasting upon cinematic synesthesia,

however senseless!

gripped by endoskeleton fingers,

fearfully devoured by hordes of

devil tongues, these masochistic

fire-breathers never cease to inflict

pain upon themselves, and share it

with me.

 

I absorb the wounds and fester

inwardly, bleeding fungurious

thoughts and singing poetic

whisper worms, that

eat in dragonlike cannibalistic

feasts.

 

friends with poisonous bluegods

and burstro-mavens, we

all spin in ethereal green

circles, swamped

with olgathic energy…

forever

 

and

now.

 

Author's Note

Captcha: sideward

Reviews

[Temerity]

Am I tripping? I'm probably tripping, and/or suffering from a schizophrenic delusion. This is a very compelling piece, albeit a little wordy at times. I like the chaos you have here. You evoke a lot through that stream-of-conscious energy, one that builds upon itself until the collapse of a few short words. It would be nice to see you synthesize your ideas a little more and perhaps cut some of the unnecessary embellishment of the wording, but you're clearly a very intelligent writer. I'd love to see you organize your thoughts a bit more, because it's already great. Conceptually, it's hard to find anything on the site that makes you think as much as this. I hope to read more of your writing in the future.

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks so much for this intelligent and insightful review, Temerity! Because I more or less wrote this off-the-cuff, I didn't do as much self-editing as I normally do; that was an exercise for me, because I'm normally my own worst critic. I agree that there is, as you said, some unnecessary embellishment in this poem, mostly because that's what I thought of at the time. I'd like to do a 2nd version (perhaps with a different title), that's more edited. One question - can you give any specifics as to where you think I could cut it down? Thanks for your critique; it's very helpful!

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow, Eric!! This is amazing. The wording is phenomenal and the imagery is stunning! Great work with this one! Below are my fav lines! (:

"I absorb the wounds and fester
inwardly, bleeding fungurious
thoughts and singing poetic"

[Eric Pudalov]

Thank you Madalyn! (I just accidentally typed "Madalunfoe" a second ago). I'm glad that it speaks to you in some way. I still wonder if this says something about my subconscious, because it's pretty much unedited!

[Madalyn Beck]

It is definitely intriguing and the subconscious is one of the most intriguing places to be - sometimes scary even. It's so cool you ventured there and came up with this write! (:

Btw.. I love Madalunfoe! Hahaha! That's pretty stellar.

[Lyn Anderson]

Quite the trip this one is - - and the vocabulary matches the insanity. Brilliant. Umm, one thing I noticed -- one of those pesky " I think might be from changing from Word to cafe' -- hyphens morph into " (first and second stanzas)

[Eric Pudalov]

Oh thanks KL!! I was wondering about that! I can edit it today, actually. Hopefully it won't change them back again. I'm working on another trippy poem, too (although it's a little less spontaneous).

[Eric Pudalov]

And here it seems, my deja-vu, another beginning of the wholeness..... as the schizo's find you, or you them, there is a interesting fact here.... (you once told me)... I color it out for myself, in it's meaning...

I quote: the perfect duality of this, and of your write here: "gray becomes reddetic warp-worms,
feasting upon cinematic synesthesia,
however senseless!
gripped by endoskeleton fingers,
fearfully devoured by hordes of
devil tongues, these masochistic
fire-breathers never cease to inflict
pain upon themselves, and share it
with me. "

There it is.... there is why there are open gateways, as it seems to attrack. "paying attention to that last sentence you wrote there" ...
Was it them? or was it you? hearing them? as if they were talking "to" you? :) ;-)

It's so interesting how this "special spectrum of colours, dances to us, and gives us new insights" of what is real, and what is immagination.... psychedelic, the same time... ;-) I won't dig to that too deep.

But fantastic my buddy... you let us see other words, (not many can resonate with), fortunately, or unfortunately I can.... it's a certain magick... spelled wrong, but that was my intention hehe...

Just fantastic... another hundred colorful visions, and a save in my library.

- Elisa

[Eric Pudalov]

Oh WOW, thank you Elisa!! I am still pondering over your poetic review here...I think you may be right - perhaps I did open a gateway to some other world here, although I may not have been aware of it. I do seem to have "visions" at times, which inspire my poetry.

I like that thought of opening new gateways.... ponder ponder, and never stop... for every thought is one. :)

[s y e]

firstly, I had fun with the picture, made my eyes go funny and weird... I took a picture and it's hilarious! Let's just say it's a picture of my eyes that will stay in a folder with a password. LOL!

Ooooo, this poem though Eric, damn dude. How fantastic is this!? The wording and imagery was like, so vivid it didn't seem real. Your poems are always amazingly well descriptive making it easy for the reader to imagine what you're writing.

// gripped by endoskeleton fingers,
fearfully devoured by hordes of
devil tongues, these masochistic
fire-breathers never cease to inflict //

Loved this lines.

[Eric Pudalov]

Holy crap, I just got around to fully reading this - thanks noodleyoodlebop! Too bad I can't see that crazy picture of you!

And thanks so much for the compliment (about being descriptive) - it's so interesting to know how someone else perceives your writing when they're reading it, isn't it?

[s y e]

You're always very welcome, the pleasure is completely mine. No one will ever see that picture, my brother wanted to but it on You've Been Framed, he would have got £250 for it. The nerve he has! :)

I think it is so interesting to see how people interpret it, I have seen me right a poem about something and someone has brought a whole new meaning to it, one that I never even thought about.