The missing piece of me

An excerpt from my book,"Everything and Nothing" ,by Danielle Castro-available at lulu.com

 

The Missing piece of me

 

The missing piece of me you are

The other half of my soul

On the other side of the world –

You are there and I am here-so may I be as so bold to say

I am lost inside your eyes

Because they burn into the very core of me

My centre-my heart-and my being

And it doesn’t get much deeper than that…

At least nothing I have ever seen-except maybe in a dream or two…

 

The missing piece of my puzzle you are

I am whole I am complete and yet still

I have no will left for much more

Than imagining myself wrapped into you

That is of course some of the things lovers do…

At least we would

Every chance we got to

And…

I am certain of this

Trust me it is true

 

Lost in it

Deep in it

Go with it

I will or until

You say I cannot any longer stay

And my heart will beat stronger

Because you are all I have ever wanted...

And more

And it feels good to me all over

It always did

I just did not know it yet…

 

How can you miss what you have never had?

I can say without a doubt

I know

I am glad

That you were led to me

Even if it means an ocean is between

We and the distance is our enemy…

I am not going to worry until I have to or want to

And that ain’t no time soon-cause I do indeed swoon

When you speak to me the way that you do

There is so much inside of you that I want to explore

And I will

That invisible thread is at work again

Tugging gently

Never wandering and completely bringing   your heart to me….

Reviews

[Rain]

I totally disagree with below reviewer, and I don't say he's wrong. We all have certain tastes. It means absolutely nothing. I guarantee you I can take a passage from a best seller, and you'll just shake your head wondering how it got there. I catch the feeling of long distance confusion...separated by military or internet. To me, I read it as if I was listening to you talk to yourself. I enjoyed it. Rain..

[Daniel Rodrigues Martin]

"And it feels good to me all over"

"There is so much inside of you that I want to explore"

These two lines spoke to me for some reason. Can't really explain why. Perhaps in some unconscious way they sum this writing for me?

Overall, I couldn't really get into this piece. I suppose that doesn't much speak on the quality of your writing as much as it does on my own tastes in regards to poetry. I think your inspiration for this poem is certainly real and viable, and it's a thing which can not be critiqued or reviewed. Nonetheless, I can't particularly say that I loved this piece.

No offense intended with anything said here.

Keep on writing.

-D