://Paris

A short bit. Rough

The metal twinkled against the strong summer light. My white handle bars were torn with all intentions of tearing dry. The noise of playing children muffled under my white tires. The rubber stuck to the tar to the beat of every cycle. My hair flew wild and unkept behind me, and long curls rhythmically patted my back. For the first time I had nothing on my mind. If you know me well enough, you'd declare this impossible, but that day was like no other. Shoes pressed against peddles, callused palms grasped torn handles, and a mind was in Paris. 

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[BeanHead:)]

well the whole of your short piece was quite good groundwork. but some things that needed editing. at the first paragraph it says "the metal twinkled in the strong summer light" , if it was really as strong as you say it is, it wouldnt be just twinkling so i suggest you find another adjective to replace this word.also the tense in this part: "If you know me well enough" it should be "if you KNEW me well enough". try to make sure your tense is the same throughout your piece when you edit it and all. good work!