Love affair

This poem is dedcated to al true lovers

Love affair

 

This is a perfect love affair,

magic moments we share

Our bodies intertwined, no concept of time

Your majestic smile, your face is my shrine

This feeling will last forever

We will always be together

I pledge my everlasting love to you

I make a solemn promise to be true

 

Let’s keep this perfect love affair,

everlasting love i will always be near

Your beauty and honesty is like a spell to me

You’re my inspiration, my exquisite angel

From the abyss of my heart I cannot describe

This feeling I have for you inside

This deepest love we will endear

I vow everyday I will be there

 

We have a perfect love affair,

Eternal hearts we will always be a pair

Your splendid regal pace, dignity and grace

You are my destiny my nemesis to be

My fortune I set my heart on you

You entice me that what you do

I give you my deepest word of honour

I will be there for you tomorrow

 

I’ll shout it from the rooftops

I know this we cannot stop

It’s your love I do decree

I’m down on my bended knees

Take this ring and say you will be mine

 

Forever magic moments my sweet divine……………………….

 

Reviews

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I think that I know why I am the first person to review this piece. It is the title. I almost did click on this. Then I thought, aww what the hell... It is just that "Love affair" sounds too familiar, too commonplace.

The poem isn't as commonplace as the title might suggest. The first line sets me off thought too, because this thing sounds much too idealized as no match between two people is ever completely perfect. You could instead say that the fit is right or that the match was a balanced one...

The second line... also a little funny sounding. magic. magic might be too simple. you could expound upon that. Our moments sprinkled with fairy dust... What you have written is by no means bad, but there seem to be ways that you could make it more interesting.

The third and fourth lines are wonderful. Well done there.

Fifth and sixth lines- done too many times before.

Seventh line is alright, the eighth quite good.

and it goes on like that, really good lines sprinkled in amongst the lines that don't leave any memorable marks on the brain. I think it would do you well to play with what you have there. Don't be afraid to get a little out there. Nobody will remember it otherwise. This has the potential to be something that lovers will really enjoy, but as is, it needs a wee bit more spark.