MIRROR IMAGE!

A poem about me, althogh in my poem I have put she, that she is really me. haha. Anyway its about how I have been struggling with depression.

Looking in the mirror I see, 

A pathetic person staring back at me. 

The look on her face is sad, she so depressed,

She yearns to be happy, to be at her best. 

She hides from the future, and her life stands still, 

She needs to go on with life, but she can't find the will. 

She has no motivation to get up and try,

So she sits back and lets the years go by.

She feels shes stuck, and will never get to the light, 

The future ahead looks dark, and not very bright. 

Her dreams seem so far away and out of reach, 

The darkness sucks its way into her, like a Leach. 

The people that love her, are trying to help her through, 

Though until she helps herself, theres not much more they can do.

But watch her and prey for her to be strong, and to fight, 

The darkness inside her, the demon of her day and night. 

So hopefully in the future, when looking into the mirror she will see, 

The brave, strong, successful and beautiful woman, she has grown be. 

One who has won the battle against the demon deep inside, 

One who is happy, and confident, and has great pride. 

      Her dreams will be reality, and she would have won, 

     A new beautiful, happy life, she will have began. 

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I had a period of depression which lasted almost 2yrs.....I can relate to what you are trying say mate....Its such a painful feeling....Nobody can help a depressed person if he himself don't make his mind to change.....But if the person does not give up, life will ultimately shine again.....Superb one....Great job.....Thumbs up!!!!!.....Full rating.....

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks again for your review, I'm sorry you have been through depression as well that sucks :(

[cycy]

i know how it feels looking in a mirror and seeing more than just a reflection but a whole life staring back at u well done

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

No thank you for the review :)

[Amber Lily]

I remember back when I was fighting depression myself, nothing helped me more than writing poetry about how I felt. It was like somehow my writing got out the feelings that I couldn't tell to anyone else, my paper was my best listener.
I really enjoyed this one because of the hint of optimism at the end. One of the best steps to take during the fight is acknowledging that you want to get better.
Keep up the great writing, It'll help :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for the wonderful review, It really does help, writing.
Just wrote another poem, thanks for inspiring me with your Homesick poem.

[Amber Lily]

No problem! :)

[DoormanDan]

This is truly a gem of a poem. It started off dark, got really dark, but in the end, it has the hint of something positive. It flows really well, you used just the right amount of literary devices, and the rhymes don't feel forced at all. I can feel the emotions behind every word you wrote. I think we've all go through something similar to what you're going through, so just know that you are not alone in this world. Stay strong! :{)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much. This was an awesome encouraging review.
You are to kind :)

[DoormanDan]

Anytime :)

[Alex B. H.]

Sadness is one of the most powerful emotions. Any emotion can be powerful, but sadness can easily move from person to person without fail. You demonstrate this in this work. I think it is best that someone pulls them self from the grasp of depression. I really do love this.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Alex :)

[dan]

cimmy, In my last review, for "Write Your Story on My Heart," I commended you for your hopefulness, your realization that if you're patient things will get better due to your strength of will alone. Let your words shine in brightness as a lot of readers can take solace in your strength of character, the emotional summits on which you dwell, on your hope. Someday you'll find that the world sees you showered in light, no more yearning for it...it's your new reality. Keep up your great work. take care...dan

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Dan. I know my poetry needs to be more light, recently almost everything I write is dark and depressing.
I really dont find myself very strong.
Thank you for the advice and encouraging words though.

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard journey in the poem.
"So hopefully in the future, when looking into the mirror she will see,
The brave, strong, successful and beautiful woman, she has grown be.
One who has won the battle against the demon deep inside,
One who is happy, and confident, and has great pride. "
Hard to defeat disappointment. I did like how you led to the positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

My boyfriend wanted me to write something happy, tried to make the ending Happy for him haha.
Thank you for your review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A happy poem is nice and you are welcome.

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A friend once said that he loved to write in the third person because he could write about himself without having to feel naked. Really, when we write about ourselves we are essentially exposing ourselves to the world. I enjoyed this piece because I am sure there are times when we all feel this way, even if it is for a fleeting moment. Good job!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer that makes sence in a funny way, though im usually very open and, people can read my like a book haha.
Thanks so much for this review :)

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You are welcome!

[W R Stowe]

Very good! This though sad is often true.I wrote a similar one titled "Man In The Mirror" but this poem tells a great story God bless

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you again for the review.
I will have to check that out sometime :)

[W R Stowe]

Your quite welcome