MIRROR IMAGE!

A poem about me, althogh in my poem I have put she, that she is really me. haha. Anyway its about how I have been struggling with depression.

Looking in the mirror I see, 

A pathetic person staring back at me. 

The look on her face is sad, she so depressed,

She yearns to be happy, to be at her best. 

She hides from the future, and her life stands still, 

She needs to go on with life, but she can't find the will. 

She has no motivation to get up and try,

So she sits back and lets the years go by.

She feels shes stuck, and will never get to the light, 

The future ahead looks dark, and not very bright. 

Her dreams seem so far away and out of reach, 

The darkness sucks its way into her, like a Leach. 

The people that love her, are trying to help her through, 

Though until she helps herself, theres not much more they can do.

But watch her and prey for her to be strong, and to fight, 

The darkness inside her, the demon of her day and night. 

So hopefully in the future, when looking into the mirror she will see, 

The brave, strong, successful and beautiful woman, she has grown be. 

One who has won the battle against the demon deep inside, 

One who is happy, and confident, and has great pride. 

      Her dreams will be reality, and she would have won, 

     A new beautiful, happy life, she will have began. 

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I had a period of depression which lasted almost 2yrs.....I can relate to what you are trying say mate....Its such a painful feeling....Nobody can help a depressed person if he himself don't make his mind to change.....But if the person does not give up, life will ultimately shine again.....Superb one....Great job.....Thumbs up!!!!!.....Full rating.....

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks again for your review, I'm sorry you have been through depression as well that sucks :(

[Rache David]

Most people must have felt this kind of thing -- all the time. There is a battle that oneself can only fight against it. I love reading it. Your rythym is perfect. This also speaks for everyone whom fighting some battles inside them. Great work cimmy.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you very much for ur wonderful review :)

[SuspectGray]

I think the last word should be "begun" not "began". I do like the rhyming but I think if you count syllables you will find that the lines are unbalanced. It might help the flow to take a look at that. As far as the topic....a reflection can be what is really there or what we want to see. When it is what's really there it can be un-nerving. In the end it is sad but hopeful. Good effort ( : O )

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank u for your advice

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I really felt this piece to the core.
An honest description of the helpless condition, I know this because I have been there and not a long while ago..
Wish you all the inspirations to live and feel the wonders of life.
Its a gift to have one, and shall never be wasted in downsizing by simply sitting back..
Loved your piece! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for that wonderful review. Im sorry you went though sumthing simular, depression sucks.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes it does. Wish you LIFE! :)

[An owl on the moon]

I went through almost one too many years of depression, and it makes me ache to know you have been suffering such pain. You describe it so well, the overwhelming sense of anxiety, of feeling trapped, stuck in the darkness. Love the hopefulness you weave into the words. Yes, focus on becoming, and letting go all those horrid shadows that try and suffocate you. Your future is an endless sunrise.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Glad and not glad at the same time that u can relate. As noone deserves to feel this way. Thanks again

[An owl on the moon]

Just remember you have someone else in your life now who sees all you will be, and who will never give up on you.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im blessed i know :) ill remember and try not to take people for granted :),

[An owl on the moon]

You do whatever you need. The rest will work itself out. :)

[mattavelli]

I enjoyed reading your poem and I hope you feel better. I've had times where it seemsed my will was deflated. Taking on new responsibilities always forced me out of my funks.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you i hope so to. Glad you can relate to my poem. Its always good to write something people relate to. Thank you for your review :)

[Novicepoet14]

I absolutely love this poem...so much emotion and I can really relate to it. Fantastic well done

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im actually sorry you relate to it, It sucks you feel like this.
Thank you for the review :)
Glad you enjoyed this :)

[Novicepoet14]

Yeah it's pretty tough but I'm getting there got an amazing family and friends who r always there :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thats great glad to here it :)

[Nyu]

Beautiful, inspirational and the rhythm was very nice and steady. I like the was you describe things :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for the review :)
Glad you enjoyed it :)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Oh, I've been in this position before. I think of lot people have. Depression happens to everyone, even the best of days. You feel like you're stuck in the moment, out of place, naked really. But this was also, in a way, a touching piece, that there is a light in the end of a dark tunnel. Good job

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I would love the tunnel to end. That be brilliant haha.
Glad you could relate, thanks for the review :)

[Ethan Brill]

You are a beautiful person. Please don't ever stop being you. Don't let the world weigh on you. The world needs a thousand more people like you :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This is such a sweet review :)
This means so much.
Thanks a million.