DEAR FATHER (GOD)

My first poem about god. Honestly don't know if its that great.

It seems as though my life has come to a holt,

I know very well that this is very much my fault. 

Im still scared of the future, of what lies ahead,

Although life goes by fast, I want to live, before im dead. 

I need to step out of my comfort zone completely, 

Im so far behind, where I should be in my Life.

Still the future scares me, so very deeply,

Though watching my life pass by, cuts me like a knife. 

I want to be happy, and move forward Father I do,

Although I know you won't help me, until to myself im true.

So if I promise to try to put my life together,

Will you lead me through the stormy weather.

Do you promise to pick me up, when I don't have the strenth to pull through?

Do you promise to give me confidence, when I lack it? because I often do. 

Do you promise to watch over me, and give me guidence, when I loose my way?

Do you promise, to never give up on me? Do you promise to always stay?

I promise I will try to talk to you more, before I go to sleep, 

You will be the last person I talk to before I slumber deep. 

Im sorry I don't keep in contact allot,

Im greatful for all you have given me, and for all I have got.

So dear Father I promise to try harder, 

to step out of the darkness and into the crowd.

To live life to the fullest, 

and to hopefully make you Proud.

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your writing, your rhymes, & your rhythm make this poem read well thru-out. I especially love the humble nature of your thoughts about life & about God. I think our readers learn more from our words when we don't preach about such things, but instead, showing our weaknesses & uncertainties, as you've done very honestly here. I could actually feel your reluctance to jump into life with both feet & how you need to get a promise that God will catch you when you fall. Even tho this is a common spiritual theme, the way you've stated it, it sounds very original & true to your life & your feelings.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for another wonderful review :)

[dan]

We (and I include myself in this) often turn to God when things are perceived to be going sideways in our lives. If only we (I) would turn to Him when things are going right, and thank Him and acknowledge His help, then things would equal out. And I'm not saying you don't so please don't think that. I guess I'm really just disappointed in myself in that regard. But this piece was written brilliantly, a nice rhyme scheme, nicely paced and the words really hit home. You knocked this one out of the park, cimmy. Very well done! take care...dan

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

You Always leave me wonderful reviews to read Dan.
I agree sometimes we ask him for so much, then forget to thank him when, he helps us make our dreams come true.
Its not right, its a silly excuse that we forget, we need to remember to say thanks and be appreciative.
Thank you so much Dan :)

[Anna Batista]

very powerful words, very lovely hope you get all your petion answered

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Anna I hope so to :)

[wordman]

this is a great prayer in the form of a poem

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[ANTO]

We make these deals with God or a higher power when we are in a predicament - I told God I would stop drinking if he saved my friend from cancer - I did but he died anyway -
This is a prayer and if the prodigals son parable teaches anything its that lost sheep have Gods ear moreso than those who don't stray.
I hope you get your prayers answered. This is quite lovely.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad you like it. I honestly didn't think this was one of my best.
So thanks for your kind review :)

[ANTO]

YVW :))....