DEAR FATHER (GOD)

My first poem about god. Honestly don't know if its that great.

It seems as though my life has come to a holt,

I know very well that this is very much my fault. 

Im still scared of the future, of what lies ahead,

Although life goes by fast, I want to live, before im dead. 

I need to step out of my comfort zone completely, 

Im so far behind, where I should be in my Life.

Still the future scares me, so very deeply,

Though watching my life pass by, cuts me like a knife. 

I want to be happy, and move forward Father I do,

Although I know you won't help me, until to myself im true.

So if I promise to try to put my life together,

Will you lead me through the stormy weather.

Do you promise to pick me up, when I don't have the strenth to pull through?

Do you promise to give me confidence, when I lack it? because I often do. 

Do you promise to watch over me, and give me guidence, when I loose my way?

Do you promise, to never give up on me? Do you promise to always stay?

I promise I will try to talk to you more, before I go to sleep, 

You will be the last person I talk to before I slumber deep. 

Im sorry I don't keep in contact allot,

Im greatful for all you have given me, and for all I have got.

So dear Father I promise to try harder, 

to step out of the darkness and into the crowd.

To live life to the fullest, 

and to hopefully make you Proud.

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your writing, your rhymes, & your rhythm make this poem read well thru-out. I especially love the humble nature of your thoughts about life & about God. I think our readers learn more from our words when we don't preach about such things, but instead, showing our weaknesses & uncertainties, as you've done very honestly here. I could actually feel your reluctance to jump into life with both feet & how you need to get a promise that God will catch you when you fall. Even tho this is a common spiritual theme, the way you've stated it, it sounds very original & true to your life & your feelings.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for another wonderful review :)

[Inject Positivity]

Hello Cimmy, was looking at your pages and found out this one again, and I'm glad I did... This is a very honest write, it contains the innocence of a heart that is confused about life and future... Your fourth stanza hits home specially because it's absolutely honest, and sane thoughts that most of us think and ask God... Again I will say it's writing that has a rawness in it that stands out and uplifts the reader...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad you loved this poem that much that you reviewed it again. Im glad u like my honestly :)
read moreIm glad you loved this poem that much that you reviewed it again. Im glad u like my honestly :)
Thanks a million for the nice second review

[Draven]

Everyone has a tendency to stay away some. That is the nature of humans. But, we must simply keep watch on ourselves and when we start to wander off, make sure we come back quickly to where we belong.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for your review :)

[Inject Positivity]

This is my fav so far....Im a firm believer in God even though im not a religious person....I do believe faith in God is a must to live a happy and honest life....You are brilliant my frnd....The poem is full of some true thoughts on God....Im feeling inspired.....Full rating Cimmy....

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I'm glad you loved this one so much and that it has you feeling inspired.
Thank again :)

[Rache David]

It's simple, genuine and full of heart poem...
it's deeply moving...
love it. :-)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Good words and a perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
"So dear Father I promise to try harder,
to step out of the darkness and into the crowd.
To live life to the fullest,
and to hopefully make you Proud."

Coyote

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for the review, means heaps. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like the structure of your composition... and the message.

I think it has great potential to be fleshed out into a prayer.

Congratulations.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you again :)

[Caradoc]

This is actually pretty good. Hits a bit close to home though...so yea.

Well done.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks :) :)

[Jamestown]

Fabulous piece of work, loved every line! Praise the Lord!!!
Yes he will help, Isaiah 41:10. ..
I have s few pieces you may enjoy to keep the praise flowing!
Thanks for sharing this amazing write, and b-blessed!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks james :)

[Jamestown]

Your welcome and b-blessed!

[Amber Lily]

I personally don't believe in god, but I really enjoyed this poem anyway! I think it's great that you have someone to look up to in your time of need to give you faith. Sometimes that's all you need is the one being that you know will never quit on you no matter how many mistakes you make. If you remain loyal they will always be at your side. Religion within itself is a beautiful thing that brings people together and gives them hope. I hope that you have found the confidence you need :)
A great write by the way!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for the great review hun.
I believe in god but im not really religious
At the same time.
Though allot of people where writting about god, so i thought i would
Try to.
Glad you liked it.