A CINDERELLA STORY!

Kind of a poem/ Story.

She walks around with head down, Depressed.

She knows she is nothing like the rest. 

Shes just a slave girl, a servant, a maid,

With no one to save her, to come to her aid. 

Dressed in draps, or pieces of cloth, she finds laying around,

Things that have been left, on the now clean and shinny ground.

People stare at her, point, giggle, and laugh, thinking shes a joke,

Except for the queens son, the prince, a handsome young bloke.

Secretly they meet up, and he gazes into her eyes intensely,

She stares right back, wondering why these feelings now grow immensely.

Every time he looks at her, suddenly she feels like a queen, 

He stares at her like shes the most beautiful girl, he has ever seen. 

Every time they meet, talk, and laugh, she no longer feels so insecure,

Suddenly she feels like she isn't just a slave girl anymore. 

He makes her feel like shes, walking in the most beautiful dress, 

Like her hair, her clothes, her shoes, arn't an ugly old mess. 

He makes her feel like, she's important, and deserves more then shes got,

He makes her feel safe and protected, like he will be there, no matter what. 

Shes has fallen in love, and suddenly shes smiling once again, 

Until reality hits, and in comes the rain. 

For she is just a slave girl, nothing more, 

Shes ugly, dirty, and down right poor. 

She knows no matter how he makes her feel, 

Shes, no queen, thats just a fantasy, its not real. 

Then the day comes, where the prince has to choose a wife, 

The slave girl is forced to come, it cuts her like a knife.

Although to everyone's amazement, he comes running to her side, 

Grabs her hand, and pushes, hes mum/the queen aside. 

He gets down on one knee, and promises to love and cherish her for life,

There is no one in this world, he would rather choose to be his wife. 

He promises her she will now receive the life she has always deserved and desired,

He looks his mum in the eye, laughs and tells her to get another maid hired. 

She now walks around the castle head held high, 

Her confidence comes naturally, she doesn't have to try.

For shes a Princess now, she was rescued. True love never fails.

She was always his Cinderella, her life is now one of those fairy tails. 

Reviews

[Rache David]

This is an amazing work..
you've had it put into a perfect adaptation...
We know that it's cinderella's story just as your title implies...
but when I read through it.. it's kind of more than that.. it's much more romantic and powerful..
i love it.. and your rhyming is excellent...
great work cimmy. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank u so much for your womderful feedback.

[Edis Radoncic]

Wow great job! i really like how you made the poem into a story. Thanks for sharing!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you. :) glad u liked it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice ending to the story in the poetry. You gave life to the characters and I liked the positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for reading and reviewing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Amber Lily]

This is simply beautiful Cimmy. The rhymes fit perfectly together with the flow and story. This poem came off as really professional to me, like something I'd read out of a published book. So glad I decided so read this one :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Wow you have no idea how much that means to me.
You have made my day thanks :)

[Heart2Soul]

Thank you for taking the old Cinderella tale and breathing new life into it! So refreshing and made me smile....

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Glad you enjoyed it :)
Thanks for the review :)

[Maskedthoughts]

I love how this is a poetic version of a classic fairytale. But you added your own flavor to it and made the story your own. Great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for the wonderful review again, you are to kind :)

[ANTO]

Some very gentle images here Cimmy - makes the reader fall in love with the the cinderella character. Thank god your version of it didnt end all gothic and have the poor girl a vampire or something - I read so many of those lately I think I need to wear garlic round my neck 24/7 (sorry Vamp lovers!!)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

HAHA! Made me laugh with this review. I like vampires to, in fact I love almost all things scary.read moreHAHA! Made me laugh with this review. I like vampires to, in fact I love almost all things scary.
Though that doesnt mean every piece is going to be dark, and scary. and goth like :P
Glad you enjoyed my version, no vampires in this piece :)

[dan]

cimmy, This is a super adaptation of Cinderella's story, touched in broad strokes by the 'cimmy magic brush.' The ways that you change it and make it your own give it a very fresh feel, a contemporary feel to it that the original does not have. Very nicely done, cimmy; thank you for read-requesting to me! take care...dan

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for the wonderful review :)
Made me laugh with your comment the cimmy magic brush :)
Thanks again Dan :)

[Jennie Baron]

I'm so soft-hearted when it comes to romantic writes, and as Tai said, it's a great version of Cinderella's story with your unique vision. Fantastic!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Jennie, glad you enjoyed the read :)