BEING APART!

I know the time is near, where our lives are about to change,

Everything is going to be different, our plans will rearrange.

Being unemployed so long has really got you down, 

Its getting to the point, where you always wear a frown. 

Im petrified of change, of growing up and all, 

I still feel like it was yesterday, I was so very small. 

I know I have to grow up, I can't keep my life standing still, 

I know your sick of hearing it but I promise I will. 

You have your wonderful home, and when it comes to family, you are blessed.

Some people don't have that, for we arn't as lucky as the rest.

You have a car and when things get tough, you can just drive away, 

Seeing as I don't have a car yet, I just have to sit here and stay. 

Im going to have to go to this course on my own, 

Without your company Im going to feel so alone.

Whilst you get a peaceful quite sleep, 

Im going to take awhile to slumber deep. 

Things will be better for you, with change taking place,

As for me though, I doubt that will be the case.

This will be extremely hard for me, but for us Ill always fight,

Because I know deep in my heart your the one for me, Youre my M.R Right. 

I miss that happy man that you where when we first meet, 

I never would have guessed how hot tempered you could get. 

That was the man who would always make me smile, 

Though now I only see him, once in a great awhile. 

Im hoping your only like this, because your life isn't quite great,

Hopefully now  things will get better for you, and its the end of the wait. 

You deserve a life that keeps a smile on your beautiful face,

My struggles will be all worth while, when your happy, and our lives fall into place.

Reviews

[Jadon96]

I love it! It shows the true emotional struggle that most couples experience. Making half of each stanza about him and the other about you, and the comparison between the two is quite brilliant actually. I would suggest though on the line "Though now I only see him, once in awhile" I would rewrite it as "Though now I only see him once in a great while" It might just be an American thing, but it just flows a little better haha. Other than that small word choice [im picky XD] it really sounds awesome!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks Jadon. I love your review.
Im glad you like the way I wrote it out :)
Yer that could work ill add the Great :P
Thanks again :)

[Jadon96]

You're welcome! haha

[Heart2Soul]

You write very emotively and that is awesome. I love seeing passion leap from the pages on any topic. Speaks to me!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much :)

[Heart2Soul]

:) you are welcome. Again, never lose that passion!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I won't I love to write always will.
Don't you loose urs either.
You are an amazing writer :)

[Maskedthoughts]

Wow the flow, the rhyming, the structure was all simply beautiful! There was emotion, a lesson, a story and just true greatness woven through this poem great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you your review means allot :)

[W R Stowe]

very beautiful piece of the prince and the pauper type relationship nice job

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[W R Stowe]

your welcome

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

I can relate to this so well! I feel the emotions that you bring out so beautifully in each and every line. Great piece of writing, my friend! As always, you are very talented! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much for your beautiful review :)

[annabellee]

Hope things'll turn out right for the both of you :)
I could really relate to that growing up part. I find that scary as well :)
Another great write :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Anna :)
Glad you can relate.
I find most people find change and growing up exciting and rush towards it, where as I hide and cling to my comfort zone, I have got to stop that haha :P

[annabellee]

Haha yeah that's what I do, too. I also find change quite hard

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Not a good quality to have :p but oh well

[MomzillaNC]

I hope your intended audience reads this and is uplifted by it.

Minor edit: It should be "I'm" not "Im"
and "I'll" not "Ill"
"You're" not "Youre"
"Mr." not "M.R"
"met" not "meet"
"it's" not "its"

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thank you :)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.