MY WILL!

Its true that I am still quite young, 

Some may say my life is far from done. 

Although people can die at any age,

So give me a book and pass me a page. 

No one knows when there time will come,

Anything could happen, any time, any day.

Sometimes people leave the world with regret,

For they didn't have a minute to say.... 

They didn't get a moment to say goodbye,

So when they don't move on this can be why.

So now even though im defiantly here still,

Here is what I would write in my will.

Life was sometimes cruel, never very kind,

Thats me being honest speaking my mind. 

I never had much family, Only one really close friend,

Although on these few people in my life, I could depend.

To my boyfriend and my sister, with you two, I leave half my heart,

You two where huge impacts on my life, my amazing works of art.

I will dearly miss my mum, my dad, and my brother to, 

I want you to know that although im gone, im sure you will pull through.

I going to miss the few true friends I received,

Im proud of the few things, I have achieved.

Im going to miss all animals, but mainly my own,

Sasha, Princess and Oliver, I'll miss you, but your not alone.

I won't miss much about the world itself,

except for my music and book's left on the shelf. 

Im going to miss my chocolate for sure, 

but up in heaven there should be more.

I'll eventually have to write a real will someday, 

and I assure you ill have plenty more to say.

Although im going to make sure nothing is left unsaid,

Because its to late to tell someone something when your dead!

Reviews

[ocean_side]

Yep, words unspoken are worth so much more when they no longer can be - so get 'em out while you can.

Really like - "I never had much family, Only one really close friend,
Although on these few people in my life, I could depend." Find it very relatable.

Great piece of work.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks so much for your review. Glad you could relate :)

[Maskedthoughts]

Again, what an incredible write. You made me think of things I have never thought of. I would describe this piece as beautifully chilling. Great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for the review :) Im glad you liked it :)

[Jamestown]

Great write, I enjoyed reading this and so happy to hear you speak of
heaven as a after life, thanks for sharing.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

[dan]

An interesting concept, writing your own will (for now). I compliment you on your creativity. Your rhyming is good and the piece flows easily past my eyes. You should never stop writing, you do so well at it. take care...dan

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Dan that was a really sweet review :)
and you to :)

[Jadon96]

It is great! I love your rhyme and it flows smoothly. In the second to last stanza though, instead of saying "except for my music and books left on the shelf" I would rewrite it to "except for my music and THIS book left on the shelf" resembling your will, tying it to the book mentioned in the very first stanza. Also, I would recreate the last stanza in this way:

"Yet this page is only temporary in my book,
And it is a review of what I have undertook,

it will eventually be replaced with a real one someday.
I assure you I'll have plenty more to say.

Although I'm going to make sure nothing is left unsaid,
Because it's too late to tell someone something when you are dead!"

Even though your entire poem is separating into stanzas of 4 lines, I would conclude the poem with the last three stanzas with 2 lines a piece, nothing says you can't haha. It gives the reader a better focus of the last few lines, which are very important to the poem. But, its your own piece of art, so it's whatever you want it to be haha

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for the tips :)
I honestly like it the way it is :P
But really thank you :)
read moreThanks for the tips :)
I honestly like it the way it is :P
But really thank you :)
So glad you liked it :)

[Jadon96]

I will tomorrow! I had to go to work, so I couldn't.. And I have school tomorrow morning, but I promise I will when I can

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

ummmm I didn't type that, I got no idea Where read more came from haha so weird.
I ain't that demanding haha. Sorry bout that. I finished school long ago :P

[Jadon96]

Well, I'm in college right now haha

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

oh university my bad :P

[Jadon96]

You know.. I am only 18 lol

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha thats fine :) Im 21 :) I have a sister who is 18 :) We are close as anything :)

[Jadon96]

Is she cute? Hahaha XD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Haha id so set you two up, if she wasn't already moved out with her boyfriend :P
Yer shes moved out of home before me. Got a car before me..... Im slow... or maybe shes to fast haha

[Jadon96]

Well, I have a car and had one since 16, but that's normal in America. But, I do still live at home.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Well im pathetic and very slow so thats just me :P
Oh yer wow 16.
Ill let you go offline so you can study :P
Laters

[Jadon96]

I don't need to study haha. More like sleep. It's 11 pm here and I have to be in class at 8 am. But yeah, I've had a car for two years and a job for two years. I work at Subway. I'm pretty sure you have Subway there?

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Oh I thought You where going to class now, my bad haha.
Oh wow, what kinda car? I want a spyder but one off the new ones. Olden day cars are ugly looking :P
Yer theres subways here :P

[Jadon96]

Well, it's a 2005 dodge neon. I paid for it with my own money, and if you know anything about the United States, our economy sucks. But, my car gets excellent gas mileage, which helps for driving to school and work everyday.

[Jadon96]

But, I first had a small truck, but I kinda wrecked it. I slid on ice on a bridge, when down a 50 foot deep ditch and hit three trees.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Wow f**k. Did you get hurt?
Iv never heard of that car before, Ill have to look it up let you know what I think :P
School and work, busy man :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Looked it up on the net haha I don't hate it.... to much :P I mean I have seen worse, but yer I dislike it. This is my dream car, what a beauty :P
http://www.bestautophoto.com/images/toyota-mr2-spyder-06.jpg

[Jadon96]

But again, I bought it with my own money at 17.

[Jadon96]

http://www.dragtimes.com/images_classifieds/1278948225-srt4-1.JPG it looks like this.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

oh yer :) What did you think of the spyder?
I don't like haha :P

[Jadon96]

And no, I didn't get hurt actually haha. And I've worked at subway for two years and work there 35 hours a week, plus going to college. But, which one, my car or the spyder?

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I don't like your car haha.
Did you like the spyder?
Wow busy life it looks like :)

[Jadon96]

It's alright, but I couldn't afford it or the gas mileage for it. My car is cheap, and it gets really good gas mileage, something I need for the distance I travel for school and work everyday, especially in the United State's economy right now.

[Jadon96]

The United State's minimum wage is 8.25 USD and I get paid 8.35 USD. On top of that, junior college [two year college, the cheapest around] is 6,000 USD per year, and an university [four year college, what ill be at in a year and half] is 12,000 USD per year. I only make 15,000 USD a year. Also, I have phone, gas, and car insurance that totals an extra 3,000 USD per year, so I don't have much money left over. I bought my car used, in 2013, for 5,000 USD. You have to realize that the United State's national debt is literally 60 times the debt of Australia's.

[Jadon96]

So, I could care less about what my car looks like, because it gets me from one place to another, its cheap, gets awesome gas mileage, and I don't owe anything on it. It's one of the absolute best cars for a college student, because it is a small economic car.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer that's fine I just thought we where talking about good looking cars. haha.

[Jadon96]

I never stated mine was a good looking car, I said it was my car. Besides, the best looking car would the bugatti veyron super sport. It is also the fastest car on production line, topping out at 267 mph, but with a price tag of 4 million USD