VALENTINE W***E!

A poem about a guy whos a real sweetheart, that falls hard for a girl, whom he has been with for a year, who crush's his heart at the end, when he finds out shes been cheating on him.

This is a story about a man called Steve,

Who fell for a beautiful woman called Eve. 

He had always wanted to give out his heart,

To a woman he would treat, like a fine piece of art.

Somehow he got her, she was now his girl,

He brought her everything diamonds and pearls.

He now spoils her rotten buying gifts, giving lots of love,

Treating her like an angel from heaven above. 

He writes her poems, and cares for her when she's sick, 

He is one of the best guys you'll find, he ain't no dick.

She loving the attention, and the pile of gifts as well,

To bad he doesn't release shes an evil b***h from hell. 

She loves receiving, but she never gives back, 

When it comes to self confidence, little does she lack.

She gets treated like a princess, but her heart is stone cold.

Blinded by love, he says she's great despite what his been told.

So this valentines day has now come around, 

He buys a ring and his prepared to kneel to the ground,

A year with her, his been faithful and true.

Now tomorrow on Valentines day, his hoping she will say I do.

He walks to her house that very next day, 

With a huge smile on his face the whole way.

He can't wait to see her and let her know,

That shes the one, and he never wants to let her go.

When he arrives he stops dead in his tracks, 

Out the front on the lawn is his best mate Max.

Max is kissing his girl, and shes clinging to him tight,

He can't believe this, this can't be right.

He storms up to them, feeling like a fool,

Max stands there looking slick and cool.

Eve glances at him, and smiles in a funny way,

She then simply says I knew you'd find out some day.

He pulls out the ring as he looks her dead in the eyes,

I can't believe our whole relationship was a lie.

You're a heartless cheating w***e, you're not worth my tears,

I can't believe I wanted you to be mine for the rest of my years.

Ill save this ring for a real girl with more class,

You'll never be more to guys then a piece of a*s. 

Because now that everyone knows your a s**t,

You'll never get any kind of respect you mut. 

So each valentines day Ill remember you for sure, 

As I tell everybody about the Valentine W***e!!!

Author's Note

Proberbly one of the worst poems I have written not my best, but i wanted to write, and I couldn't really think, so I came up with this anyway.....

Reviews

[sheza]

Great peace cim getting better everytime!! uu have one imagination ahah :P dunno how u think of this stuf.. haha itwas really good though.. thoughtful sad story with a touch of comedy :P was great to have that mix.. and the title makes people want to read it!! it was great. i know u hate hearing this not about spelling just like comma's and stuff some of it just didnt add up cause there werent comm;as and tat were they should have been but other then that well done!!:D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer my punctuation sucks, need someone to actually help me fix it up.
Thanks Sis your reviews are awesome :)
Love ya :)

[sheza]

haha its ok :D yeah cant mark or mum help?

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer Mark helps me a little :)

[Penny]

Nice poem and I like it because it tells a story. As you said, not your best but definitely entertaining. Wanna know where you got the inspiration from.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you Penny :)
I actually don't know where I got the inspiration for this one, just popped into my head.

[Penny]

My pleasure. And let your head pop like this only, and you'll continue to be mindblowind. Lol.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Haha thanks will do :P

[cycy]

Ill save this ring for a real girl with more class,
You'll never be more to guys then a piece of a*s.
Because now that everyone knows your a s**t,
You'll never get any kind of respect you mut.

So each valentines day Ill remember you for sure,
As I tell everybody about the Valentine W***e!!!
- i loved it cimmy well done and e rhyme and the theme is great too

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks Hun glad you enjoyed it :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Women are such b*****s sometimes .Oh well he better thank his lucky stars he found out before she accepted his ring.Nicely penned lines Cimmy :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks :) yer very lucky :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[melissa]

Great poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thank you :)

[melissa]

Your welcome

[annabellee]

Aw, not his best friend...!
The poor guy. I really liked this one a lot, you made me feel really sorry for him.
Great story, great poem :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww thanks for the review hun.
Yeah it's pretty sad what happened to him.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[s y e]

Such a heartless biatch for sure. Ouch, that had to hurt! A powerful, heart wrenching write.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)
yer she is :P

[Madalyn Beck]

Well, damn. This is a heartbreaking write! This is actually the reason I hate Valentines day. Fantastic story! (:

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you hun, once you find the right guy though Valentines day can be great :)