FROM MY SISTERS HEART!

My sister hasn't written in awhile she has to many other talents the lucky b***h,myonly talent is writing,and she's getting better at that then me.She wrote this the other day,Feed back would be great

Im lost for words, so lost for words. Why and how did u make it worse?

Everything made sense when you were around .. now my feet just stay on the ground.

The emptiness and pain I feel it all..

Thought you were there to catch my fall.

You start thinking excessively and the world turns dark.

U fought and fought but

everything insists on leaving marks.

Inside my brain,physically,mentally emotionally

I've gone insane. 

Help me now, lets figure it out… But no one can work out my where abouts. You know what to be honest neither can I, Just going to leave everything with a sigh.

I try and try to fix people..make them become better then what they are.

But they all seem to throw me in the far. Now im lost and time goes by fast.. I wish oh wish I could make It last. All the pain and the truth I cant take no more A never ending battle Is all my lifes fighting for.

So ashamed and confused Im so broken not bruised, At this point it’s a laugh to you all Just to push me around and watch me fall. The ones I love and trust should be there to pick me up. They all get caught up in there own world for me there's no luck.

Because im so anxious ,depressed and tired I push them all away

Then im left alone and I just don’t know the way

Questioning everything that ever comes to mind When realistically its basically fine? My heads over thinking, running back to the past. Making me give up so quick oh so fast. I reach and reach but no one heres my call So goodbye world I hope this was a pleasure to u all!

WRITTEN BY MY WONDERFUL SISTER SHEREE SPITERI :)

Reviews

[Bowers]

damn, this is great. How deep these words run, how true they're expressed, a wonderful write! I could only wish to have the ability to portray feelings in such a way as you have, nicely done! I envy your way with words, my dear friend!

"my head's over thinking, running back to the past"
girl, I only wish I couldnt relate to this line.. :(
this whole piece actually, it was as though you were speaking my very thoughts, and I truly love and admire how you took realistic feelings and issues and put them down on paper so beautifully!

"so ashamed and confused, so broken-not bruised" this line stood out to me, because its so hard when were broken, yet no bruises prevail? I loved it! :D

"Im lost for word, so lost for words.Why and how did you make it worse?" jeez, again with the mind reading ;) seriously though, a great line, that I can connect to, you've put so much feeling into this piece, I honestly, absolutely LOVE it, you are so talented!
great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

HAHA! I wish this was mine I know its amazing this is Sheza's poem she is my sister :)
I posted it for her before she had an account.

[Bowers]

haha that is too nice of you! Im glad she made an account though :) She's super talented! but hey! SO ARE YOU!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awwww thank you. Yes I know this is one of her MANY TALENTS!

[Bowers]

haha, I becha you have just as many talents as she does !

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha no writing is my only talent :P

[Bowers]

lol.... until you try to do something else ;)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I have tried allot of things i suck at most of them :P

[Bowers]

... lol, say you, deary I bet I'd disagree!! :D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

heheh you are sweet :)

[sheza]

Haha cim u didnt have to post it!!Im not stealimg ur talent its just sometimes getting everything out comes out bbetter on paper!! im honestly not that talented and could never everbeat ur writing skills women!! :P haha thanks thouggh

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

You honestly are an amazing writer haha.
Do you want me to delete it now that you posted it on your? or leave it?
Your welcome :)

[sheza]

hahah I don't care cim. upto u my dear:D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Since when do you say hun and my dear? haha sounds weird coming from you :P
Yer ill just leave it :)

[sheza]

lol :P idk.. since I was getting better :P getting sweeter:P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Haha :P i see :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

There's a resonating pain in this piece. She did a great job. You are talented as well, don't sell yourself short.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww thank you, that is a lovley confidence boost :) Ill let her know you liked it :)

[Tina Louise UK]

Seems talent runs in the family..she did a great job with this one hun :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you hun i will let her know that you think shes talented :)

[Penny]

Ha.. you know I feel the same for my best friend what you feel for your sister. He is better at college, sings and dances terrific and yet his writings are more focused than mine, and I have to tell the dog, when he writes occassionally to stop stealing my talent... lol. Now about the poem, tell her its wonderful and surprisingly it isn't like your writings which describe 'perfect world' rather these have a pain in them, something I could relate to. The structure is good too. Awsm job.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww thank you Penny she loved your review, she said wow that's pretty good tell her thanks :)

[Penny]

My pleasure..

[Erik Daniel]

I like it. Tell her she did a good job!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

she says thank you :)