THE CATERPILLAR!

A random little poem/story i thought of... with a little bulling in it. About a caterpillar who feels as though he doesn't belong.

There once was a caterpillar, 

small,fat and very green. 

Living amongst owls, birds and more,

all laughing at him, they where so mean. 

He crawls around head down in shame,

In the dirt, mud and even the rain. 

He hears the others calling hes name,

Mocking him, as he hides hes pain.

He feels so ugly, fat, unwanted and unloved,

He always gets knocked about, pushed and shoved.

The others tell him he will always be this way, 

Fat, green, and ugly, he doesn't have a say.

The caterpillar gets older as time goes by,

He crawls up a tree and builds a cocoon.

He wish's he could be free, away he would fly,

Little did he know he's wish would soon come true. 

Months later the other's gasp in awe, 

As they look up at the tree ever green. 

Out of the cocoon come's a beautiful butterfly,

The most beautiful they had ever seen. 

I am free he sings as he flutters around, 

He no longer crawls on the dirty old ground.

He looks down upon the others and gives a smile, 

I'm out of here he says, i want be back for a long while.

He flutters off and to his right, 

Another butterfly, beautiful and white.

She flutters around him singing with glee, 

You my love are coming home with me.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"Little did he know he's wish would soon come true."
Suggestion-> "Little did he know his wish would soon come true."
"I'm out of here he says, i want be back for a long while."
Suggestion-> "I'm out of here he says, I won't be back for a long while"

I love this poem! The bullies were speechless when they saw how that poor little caterpillar turned out!
Great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for your wonderful review glad you enjoyed :)

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Penny]

Wat a beautiful tale. Reminds me of d saying all's well that ends well. Sweet poem but 1 cn really learn much from it. Keep writing like this.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I don't usually write anything like this, but i did enjoy writing it :)
Im glad you liked it :) thanks for the review :)

[Penny]

It had my pleasure. And it doesn't if you write like this or not at least you kbow you can.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yes its good to know im getting better, i can write about almost anything now :)

[Penny]

:-) :-) :-)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Awwww this was so precious!!! :) I really love this!!! Great job with this, it was adorable :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww thank you hun glad you enjoyed it :)

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

Awww such a cute wee poem! and well done with the rhyming scheme too! My only suggestion is that with the butterfly's dialogue you put apostrophes in as if it was normal dialogue, makes it that little bit clearer :)

Bravo and keep on writing!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks for your lovely review :)