THE CATERPILLAR!

A random little poem/story i thought of... with a little bulling in it. About a caterpillar who feels as though he doesn't belong.

There once was a caterpillar, 

small,fat and very green. 

Living amongst owls, birds and more,

all laughing at him, they where so mean. 

He crawls around head down in shame,

In the dirt, mud and even the rain. 

He hears the others calling hes name,

Mocking him, as he hides hes pain.

He feels so ugly, fat, unwanted and unloved,

He always gets knocked about, pushed and shoved.

The others tell him he will always be this way, 

Fat, green, and ugly, he doesn't have a say.

The caterpillar gets older as time goes by,

He crawls up a tree and builds a cocoon.

He wish's he could be free, away he would fly,

Little did he know he's wish would soon come true. 

Months later the other's gasp in awe, 

As they look up at the tree ever green. 

Out of the cocoon come's a beautiful butterfly,

The most beautiful they had ever seen. 

I am free he sings as he flutters around, 

He no longer crawls on the dirty old ground.

He looks down upon the others and gives a smile, 

I'm out of here he says, i want be back for a long while.

He flutters off and to his right, 

Another butterfly, beautiful and white.

She flutters around him singing with glee, 

You my love are coming home with me.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"Little did he know he's wish would soon come true."
Suggestion-> "Little did he know his wish would soon come true."
"I'm out of here he says, i want be back for a long while."
Suggestion-> "I'm out of here he says, I won't be back for a long while"

I love this poem! The bullies were speechless when they saw how that poor little caterpillar turned out!
Great write!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for your wonderful review glad you enjoyed :)

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Bri]

So cute! The simple story you are telling reminded me of school kids. :P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer kids can be crewl i should know from my school days.... thank f**k there over.
Thank you for your review :)

[Tai Ryens]

The perpetual cycle of nature taking its course is truly a spectacular experience to behold. Taking everything as a metaphor for society seems to suit this poem very neatly, as the caterpillar is continually teased for not being a bird, yet metamorphoses into this new, beautiful creature that isn't quite a bird, but rivals their beauty. And to top it all off, the birds can't eat them, they taste disgusting. Well done!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you very much for ur kind words. I apreciate the review:)

[Kai Rollins]

It was a nice solid write. I like the sheer, imagination this has. It was fun
Thanks for this

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for your review :)

[Ars Goetia Poetry]

I like this a lot. I have wrote a similar piece called 'Tukish Delight' about a rose who was hated by the nettles lol @ Writerscafe.org/mrdunne

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thank you glad you liked it. Oh yer :)

[Moon]

Oh I love this poem so much ! Not only is it cute but it is also quite lovely. The poor little caterpillar, I know how he feels. I have be pushed around, discriminated, and looked down upon for so many years. It hurts and can really do some damage.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yes i usto get picked on as well, so i guess that made it easier to write this.
Im sorry you also get picked on, its not right and certainly not fair.
Im sure you are a lovely person.
Thank you for your review :)

[Moon]

Thank you very much and you are welcome. It is unfair, but that's just how life is, unfair.

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is a very sweet poem. I like nature-themed pieces. Great job!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[Laura Harrison]

What a lovely read, I enjoyed this one :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you! glad you enjoyed this one :)

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

This is like a child's fairy-tale. I find it delightful.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you glad you enjoyed :)

[mark]

what a great story hun i enjoyed reading this one :)
very well written great rhyming :)
u come up with such random ideas ur a natural
you have to do something with ur writing babe its amazing...just like you :)
great piece i love it well done :)
xxxx

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww thanks hun yo sweet words put a smile on my face :)
It means the world to me just how much you believe in me and my writing :
Thank you :)

[mark]

hehe im glad they put a smile on ur face sweety :)
i do i believe in you more than anybody :)
you're welcome my beautiful girl xxxx

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awww i love you so much hun that means allot really :)
I got to go ill see you soon :)

[mark]

i love you too gorgeous :)