YOUR HUGS!

Iv wrote about your kisses,

So its time to write about your hugs.

every time your gone my body always misses

and yearns,aching for you it silently tugs.

I imagine giving a tug,

pulling you as if your near.

opening my arms for a hug,

crushed as i know you not here.

I miss you when your away, 

Im sorry it doesn't always show.

I want to ask you to stay,

but we do knead space and so of you go.

Your hugs mean so much,

you really dont understand.

Your embrace your touch,

I love when you take my hand.

Take my hand and pull me close,

As you whisper sweet things so true.

Ill smile and giggle a little,

As im thinking of those memories to. 

cuddle me close and hold me tight,

As im sorry i cant sleep in your arms.

Your in my dreams and thoughts every night,

you've got me hooked im drawn to your charms.

So now iv written about your kisses,

And also about your hugs.

Your here today my body no longer misses, 

yearns, and has stopped giving its tugs.

Reviews

[Fire Mage Andrea]

Right, before I lavish any praises, I'll get the errors (negative stuff, if you like) out the way :

"Iv" - Should be "I've"" (as in I have)
"Your here today" change to "you are here today" (best check the your and you're in each sentences. This rule of the English language quite often throws people ;-)
"every time your gone my body always misses and yearns, aching for you it silently tugs." - What about changing it to "every time you're gone my body always misses you
and my heart aches, yearning for your tender touch" ?
"i know you not here." - "you're not here"

You may want to check the poem all the way through for grammar and spelling.

Now for the positive stuff :-)

"So its time to write about your hugs" - this sentence is fine :-) no probs there
It's a lovely poem and it has that nice sort of, erm, teenage-romance thing going on
Cosy little pic at the bottom, yous two look proper happy together
Nice little Valentine's Day poem as well.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I appreciate you're help, although i do feel like as long as people can read it and its understandable, then its fine, there weren't really any major errors.
I refuse to change any of the poem as i like it the way it is, but thank you so much for the sugestions :)
With the spelling, my boyfriend is helping me put all my poems onto word, and then when i have enough im going to print them off, staple them together, and try to see someone that can help me publish them.
My boyfriend has corrected all of them once re written for me :)

Thank you for liking my poem besides not liking all the errors lol :)
I will be sure to check out your stuff when i get time :)

[Fire Mage Andrea]

Thanks - just one warning though, my book (which has all the chapters uploaded) is in the "light" fantasy genre, just in case you're not into that sort of thing 80)

Thanks and good luck with your poems

Andrea

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I dont read books often anyway, i read the poems, do you have any poetry?

[Fire Mage Andrea]

The book has both short stories & poetry in it :-)

I'd Love To Go To A Place
As A Child
Back In Time
Bedroom Window
In My Dreams
Vinegar Bottle
and Rainbow Bubbles are all the poems in Fantastica - Surreal Stories & Poems

Let me know what you think

Thanks

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Sure ill read it when i get around to it :)

[Sarah Lynn]

The way you two write about each other is just so sweet and adorable! Anyone can clearly see the love! I love your writing! Another great poem (:

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks Sarah so glad you like my work :) Ill review your stuff when i get the time promise :)

[zaneybear]

this is just pure adorableness:) it's so so so so cute!!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha thanks so much for your review glad you enjoyed it :)

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

That is one of the cutest things I've ever read >w> Your girlfriend is very lucky :) Ignore that Chris guy in the comments :) I liked it and I'm certain everyone else does too :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im a chick hun this is to my boyfriend hehe.
Glad you enjoyed it :)
thanks i dont care what he thinks anyway hes an idiot haha :)

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Oh! Whoops xD that happened to me to. Someone thought I was a dude to :3

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

lmao hehe so then what u thought ud do it to me hmmmm :P jokes :P but seriously if i was a guy would my name be cimmy wuv xxxooo well maybe..... IF I WAS GAY! :P hehehe

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

A FABULOUS GAY GUY!! The very best xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

hmmmm don't sweet talk me woman :P
but i would be wouldn't i??? :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Oh, the most amazing one out there. You'd walk into that gay bar and they'd all flock to your side xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer to bad im not a man aeee :P but i think the girls would do the same if i walked into a leso bar aeeeeee??? :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

No -_- you have to be gay. You have no choice.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

lol :P well i cant be i have a womans.... body :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Sex change. That's the only answer. There is no way around it.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Hmmmmm let me think no thank you i like being a woman :P you sure you dont wanna??? :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Well yeah xD but i think id make a wonderful transvestite :) you'd be a good one too xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

na hun, you would be wayyyyy better transvestite then i.... :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Oh pfft , your just saying that ://3

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

no im not seriously :P everyone would love you :)

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Cause I'd have my own stage show and throw candy at the crowed? :3

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Ill be in that crowed if you throw some chocolate :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Thank you :") haha

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

so your going to throw in some chocolate or not? i get very cranky if i don't get my chocolate???

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Ill throw you lots of chocolate :33 I big bucket of it :33

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

omg i love you :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

:") I love you too!!! Lets run away together and be tranny's together!! Just don't let our boyfriends know xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

LMAO :p he saw dis O_O
We should though anyway ill still visit him i wonder if he will be ok wid dis..... hmmmm :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Mine too xD lets just tell them that we are just friends and every time we visit eachother we are just having girly sleepovers. XD then sneak into those clubs and rock our cross dressing awesomeness TwT

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Lmao yer that sounds like a plan to me :P i like the way chu think :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Haha this has been a lovely talk xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yes it has been haha :P Your pretty cool :P

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Your pretty cool too :")

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thank chu :)

[NeiL ArandA]

Very sweet and romantic !

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks glad you enjoyed:)

[Me]

aww that was so lovely, beautiful hun :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks hun glad you enjoyed :)

[annabellee]

Another sweet poem of yours, I liked how you somehow repeated the first stanza at the end.
I enjoyed reading it :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yer i liked doing that to makes it sound very poetic :)
thanks for the review hun :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

Oh my..an amazing love piece..a pure expression of your love..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks you for reviewing im glad you like it :)

[mark]

awwwww your so sweet babe.
i love it, it made me smile so much :)
it beats mine why do u always beat me with better poems hehe.
my hugs mean that much? i wish u show it more :)
great poem babe i am greatful my hugs are that meaningful.
thank you so much honey :)
i love you and miss you soooo much xxxooo

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I think yours is better :)
Thanks hun so glad you like it :)
Im sorry i don't, i dont know how else to show it. Doesnt it look like im enjoying them when u cuddle me?
they are :)
I love you to babe i miss you more :)

[mark]

yours beats mine by far.
i do its beautiful.
yeah it does show when u do that :) but i want more cuddles hehe :)
good :)
hehe ok agree to disagree on that :P