BROKEN HEARTED GIRL!!

A poem i wrote about a broken hearted girl :) and a heart breaking guy :( let me know what you think

She trusted him that handsome guy,

She believed him as he told lie after lie.

He said he loved her and forever would,

He said he wouldn't leave her he never could.

A good looking guy only playing a part,

acting like she meant so much.

Hes got what to say down to an art,

He got want he wanted after just one touch.

This broken hearted girl

at the time her heart exposed.

This a*****e jerk of a guy,

at the same time this he knows.

He knows very well this is her first time,

She thinks hes amazing to her this feels right.

He thinks of this as a game a perfect crime,

She thinks hes the one this is her perfect night.

Then the next morning hes gone,

she wakes to see the note.

Nothing could prepare her

for the horrid things he wrote.

Thanks it said for such a great f**k,

If your looking for more your out of luck.

You where nothing more then a good ol time,

i fooled you and committed the perfect crime.

Her heart shattered she feels like a fool,

How could someone be so cruel.

Her heart feels like its been ripped in two,

A shattering pain that she never knew.

Putting walls up her heart now guarded well,

will anyone ever break through in time will tell.

Along comes a guy looking for love,

She walks by with the beauty of a dove.

He glances her way and cant help but smile,

Hes now got her heart although it took awhile.

Hes the guy that keeps her locked in hes embrace,

he keeps her safe and warm and out of harm.

Her happy heart now found its rightful place,

Inside the prince of Notre Dame.

Reviews

[mark]

this is a great story/poem babe.
well done i really enjoyed reading it.
there are allot of a******s out there that would do that and don't feel bad about it i'm just glad i'm not like that. great ending though great work babes.
i love you so much xxxooo

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad i never have to be like one of those broken hearted girls anymore, i have finally found a great guy. Thats why im not willing to give up on you :)

[mark]

awwww how sweet are you. i will never do that to u babe i would hate myself if i ever did something like that. i have found a great girl that i'm not willing to give up on :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

Really good piece..
I'm glad the real love arrived and saved her..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yer had to give it a good ending :) thanks for reading :)

[Angel]

I'm a sucker for a happy ending.
The place you are thinking of, with the hunchback...it is Notre Dame. The hunchback's name was Quasimodo, and the gypsy girl he loved was called Esmeralda. It's a beautiful story "The Hunchback of Notre Dame"...

Good job!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I wached it ages ago when i usto have foxtell on disney never to old for Disney movies.
One of my favourite disney movies is the lion king but i like 2 more then 1.
Yer ill fix the spelling of it :)

[NA]

I can totally relate to this hun, excellent piece :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks Raven glad you enjoyed

[annabellee]

Sad and heartfelt poem but I'm glad it has a happy ending. Well written :)
Could you please tell me though what noltradam means?
Gorgeous write :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks hun glad you liked it.
I heard it from the hunchback of noltradarm i think its a place or something.
I had nothin else to rhyme with it lol :P
thanks again hun :)

[annabellee]

haha ok :D you're most welcome :)

[Joyrider]

truley Heart breaking. this is the way of life. everything happens for good.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

this is true.
glad you liked it.
thanks for your review :)

[Lisa Victoria]

Cimmy, what a tragic, but altogether true story. I'm glad you put the happy ending:) Some guys are a******s like that, but we should never give up...the good ones are out there. Really enjoyed this, good write as always:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

not about me if you where thinking that i have a great guy i know they are :)
just thought i would write a poem about a broken hearted girl :)
glad you liked it :)
thanks so much god bless :)

[Lisa Victoria]

Glad to hear it:)