SISTERLY LOVE!

A poem i wrote about my sister, i could have done better couldn't think that well so its probably crap. Let me know what you guy think.

Friendly and loving with such a big heart,

its amazing how much you care.

Once so close now where so far apart,

Although you know if you ever knead me im there.

We have both grown up so very fast,

things so different now then before

thinking of all those memories in our past,

but there's one thing i know for sure...

No matter the distance no matter how far,

Just know im thinking of you wherever you are.

I love you sis distance could never keep me away,

I know i can be annoying but you love me and im here to stay :)

your such a country chick, 

whilst i love the city.

you've seemed to grow up so quick,

all iv done is work with kitty's

This sisterly love now stronger then ever,

and although we don't see each other much

I know we could never loose touch,

Your my sister and we will always stick together :)

Author's Note

Please leave reviews!

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"This sisterly love now stronger then ever,

and although we don't see each other much

I know we could never loose touch,

Your my sister and we will always stick together :)"
The ending sums it up greatly . A great poem and tribute to sisterly love...:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks so much im glad u liked it. Thanks for the review :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Urja Gokani]

i kind of liked it cuz i have two elder sisters and i am the third one soo.. i loved it :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks glad you enjoyed :)

[sheza]

Cim ur right not the best poem haha:P but i know how much u love me so i was scanning for something about me hahah:P its still touching knowing youd take ur time to right one about me and words are always meaningfull.. Touched my heart! actually quite upset right now with that making it worse,, only cause the distance sucks.. at times like this i remeber going on walks with u talkking adn i miss u!!! so much.. it sucks things change but ohwell..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer i could have done better but oh well....
I thought you might :P
Awwww sis i miss you to, i love coming to see you, i wish i could be there more.
If you need to talk Im here for you you know that yer :)

[sheza]

haha its still appreciated!! shows u still love me :P
yeah I know come down soon ill be comingdown to urs sometime next week!!!:D but usoo have to come stay again.. yeah I know.. just sometimes doesn tfeel the same anymore... im pretty shut off now..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

HAHA still love you :P of course i do always will :)
Oh yay ill try make sure im home should be :)
Yer i know I love coming to see you :)
Awwww If you wanna call and talk or anything im here, but call on marks phone because mines just shocking.
Mark and I are saving up for new phones now :)

[sheza]

haha kool :) I know I like the company.. I know:) oh yeah kool

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

im really sorry i wasnt there for you last night :( i feel horrible, I have been in bed by that time latly.

[sheza]

yeh that's fine :)

[Lisa Victoria]

This reminds me of my daughters:) Very well done...I enjoyed this a lot!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your daughters are close?
thanks so much glad you enjoyed :)
Always appreciate feedback :)

[Lisa Victoria]

My daughters are very close...one lives in LA and one in Fresno, but they spent the summer together:) I really enjoyed this!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

awww good they are close i understand the bond :)
thanks so glad you did :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

1st stanza line 3 - where should be we're
1st stanza line 4 - knead should be need
2nd stanza line 2 - then should be than
3rd stanza line 3 - "I love you sis distance" should be "I love you sis, distance"
4th stanza line 4 - iv should be I've
4th stanza line 4 - kitty's should be kitties
5th stanza line 1 - "This sisterly love now stronger then ever" should be "This sisterly love is now stronger than ever"
5th stanza line 3 - loose should be lose
5th stanza line 4 - Your should be You're

Other than all of these grammatical errors, this is a nice poem. Good flow and rhyme.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Why is everybody so obsessed with perfection, i think people should look at a poem for the meaning and only really worry about the grammar if its bad enough that you cant even understand the poem.
Thank you for trying to help but the grammar problems are very minor. Although if its such a big deal to allot of people on this sight i will change them and fix it when i get the time.
Im glad overall you like the poem i guess.
Fustrated but thanks anyway

[Ravyne Hawke]

Perhaps we should part ways, Cimmy. If I see grammatical errors as extensive as this I am going to note them.. not to be critical, but to help. You obviously don't want help, just praise.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

its not that i don't want help its just they were not as big as you say they are. We just happen to disagree alot not trying to argue with you as i appreciate your feedback. I just disagree with you a bit.

[sheza]

HAha sis I know corrections can be annoying but if ever one day u want to publish or even just for this site, grammar and stuff is pretty important :P

[Anthony Hall]

A precious and beautiful love filled poem about your sister, I loved it, awsome pen..Tony**
Thank you for your wonderful comments, my friend.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

im so glad you enjoyed it :) your always welcome i love to leave feedback for poems that deserve it :)

[Anthony Hall]

Thank you, appreciate..Tony**

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your welcome :)

[NA]

Wonderful read, you are so lucky to have a sister...I always wanted one but got two brothers instead :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

brothers can be such a pain i have one hes 14 but he acts like hes 20. I don't have to see him much anymore i live with mum, hes with dad. Must suck having 2 brothers you poor thing ones enough. Im glad you liked it :) I am lucky shes the best sister i could have asked for

[SyberRose]

Cute read...i grew up in the city but live in the country now...enjoyed you sister poem...as i have a sister too....Rose:)...sweet photo too.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much rose im glad you enjoyed the read :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Nice how you made clear that one of you is a country girl while the other is a city girl, and that you both have different taste but meet at loving one another.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks im so glad you liked it. Thank you for reviewing :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

What a relief, thank you.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

lol your welcome :)

[mark]

awww that is so cute babe :) really sweet poem bout ur sis. very touching words too :)
you and ur sis have a great bond dont let anything ruin that :) the distance part is hard but u will always be there for eachother. once again very sweet and cute poem babes she will love that :) well done xxx

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks hun im so glad u liked it mwa xxxooo :)

[mark]

i did babe it was very sweet of you to write something like that for ur sister :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

what can i say im an awecim sister :)

[mark]

u are babe :)