ELECTRIC!

Its electric the look in your eyes,

As they stare into mine burning with desire.

Its electric our love they despise,

Only because its that kind of love they require.

Body to body skin on skin,

a sexual erge rising from within.

As now its to late your my prisoner to keep,

shhhh don't talk for my dear talk is cheap.

Inprissend, intoxicated, indulged by my touch,

Its electric how you make me feel.

Kissing and wanting, the blankets you now clutch,

you wonder if your dreaming if this is real.

Its more then real what you and i share,

fully exposed with an open heart to you i bare.

Wrapped up in each other under the comfort of a sheet,

listening to the sound of each-others steady heartbeat.

Just like music your a favorite song i could never delete,

Just like music all day/everyday id leave you on repeat.

We belong together this happiness now found

and to each other we are now always bound.

Reviews

[costa siwale]

This is awesome..enjoyed it millions

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks so glad you liked it :)

[closed]

this is pretty intense
nice word usage and structure

enjoyed it

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks so glad you enjoyed it thanks for reviewing :)

[zaneybear]

I really love the stanza about music, I just love the comparison in any piece but especially in this one. I adore the word choice, and the way this piece flows I feel like singing it not just reading it. well done.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Lol i would love to here it being sang, i cant seem to write songs i can write almost everything else, poems, story's, books but songs im hopeless lol.
Thank you so much for your kind review means allot :)

[Ankur Sharma]

lovely writing electric as the title is
"Body to body skin on skin,
a sexual erge rising from within.
As now its to late your my prisoner to keep,
shhhh don't talk for my dear talk is cheap."


amazing lines to disturbe any body emotions.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks they were some of my best lines i know :)
thank you so much for your nice comments and feedback, was much appreciated.

[annabellee]

Gorgeous poem like always, loved it. And I would prefer all day to everyday if you're still undecided :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

haha na i put that as in like both all day and everyday :) thanks hun always love your feedback

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[NA]

Wonderfully romantic, beautiful hun :) x

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks so much hun glad you liked it :)

[mark]

awwwww this is really sweet babe :) very well written. how much have u wrote me lately i feel bad now :(
i really love this one. well done babe ur so sweet :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks hun im glad u like it :)
Quite a bit u have wrote me heaps of poems no nead to feel bad.
glad u loved it babe. I try :P

[mark]

i do its a really good one :)
u have wrote me more lately i cant help but feel bad and urs r better
thanks hehe :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

idk if mine are beter some of your cut it close, ur so talented your a great wrter to :)

[mark]

awww thank you sweety urs have better words though especially this one :)